Description of a video about hony, thank you for helping me :-)
I'm trying to improve my writing by commenting a video. It would be so lovely to correct it.
The scenery must take place in New York because the video's title is « humans of New York ». Besides, the video is a portrait of a man saying he came to New York in order to take pictures. We can see different streets of New York and also a park. It may be Central Park because the park looks 'quite big '. The action may take place during the XXIst Century because clothes are modern and the photographer's camera as well.
It is the portrait of Brandon Stanton, from Chicago who lost his job. He decided to move in New York in order to follow his passion by taking picture of hundreds of people in the street. He must be a sociable person because we can see in the video he is talkative and friendly toward strangers. In the beginning of the video, he approached a man talking to him nicely with a friendly high pitch voice « Sir, anyway I can take your photo ? I am a popular street reporter and you look great. » Later, we can see Brandon engaging conversation with other people, laughing, smiling and looking genuinely interested by asking questions to theme. He does not look afraid to get rejected by people when he asks to take their picture in the street.
What is being photographed is a variety of people chosen randomly by the photographer. We can see Brandon taking pictures of a young girl around 4 years old making bubbles soap in a street of New-York, three teenagers chilling in a greenery scenery. He also takes picture of a young woman with creative handmade earrings, a middle aged man probably working.
The photographer explains he had no plan and he just wanted to take photos. He collected a lot of pictures and decided to create a blog. He said he wants to take picture of what makes him happy and celebrating normal people on the stage. It might be because he wants to show that beauty of New York lies in the diversity of its inhabitants and emphasizes the beauty of daily life.
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Description of a video about honey. Thank you for helping me :-)
I'm trying to improve my writing by narrating a video. It would be so lovely to have it corrected.The scenery must take place in New York because the video's title is "Humans of New York". In the video is a portrait of a man saying he came to New York in order to take pictures. We can see different New York streets and also a park. It may be Central Park because the park looks 'quite big '. The action might take place during the XXIst Century because the clothes are modern and is the photographer's camera.
It is the portrait of Brandon Stanton, from Chicago, who lost his job. He decided to move to New York in order to follow his passion of taking pictures of hundreds of people in the street. He must be a sociable person because we can see in the video he is talkative and friendly toward strangers. At the beginning of the video, he approaches a man talking to him nicely in a friendly high pitched voice "Sir, is there any way I can take your photo ? I am a popular street reporter and you look great". Later, we see Brandon engaging in conversation with other people, laughing, smiling and looking genuinely interested asking questions to theme. He looks unworried to get rejected by people when he asks to take their picture in the street.
What is being photographed is a variety of people chosen at random by the photographer. We see Brandon taking pictures of a girl around 4 years old, making soap bubbles in a New York street*, three teenagers chilling in a green scene**. He also photos a young woman with creative handmade earrings, and a middle aged man who is, perhaps, working.
The photographer explains he has no plan and just wants to take photos. He collects many pictures and decides to create a blog. He says he wants to take pictures of what makes him happy and to celebrate normal people on the stage. It might be because he wants to show that the beauty of New York lies in its inhabitants' diversity and to emphasize the beauty of daily life.
y x instead of .. x of y, is more natural in English: train ticket instead of ticket of train, NY street instead of street of NY etc. x of y is also good English, but rarely used and more in the French, Spanish, Italian... style.
very well written!
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