thank you for your support The line chart describes the amount of the foreign visitors of Australia yearly from 1975 to 2005. The table exhibits the original countries visitors came from and the numbe

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thank you for your support The line chart describes the amount of the foreign visitors of Australia yearly from 1975 to 2005. The table exhibits the original countries visitors came from and the number of those visitors.

Based on the data provided, annual visits to Australia showed a stable increase while it is Japanese that travelled to Australia the most.

According to the line graph, started from approximately 9 million in 1975, Australia welcomed 30 million visitors at the end of the period. Besides, except between 1985 and 1995 the annual visitors grew 10 million, both figures rose 5 million in the first and last decades.

As we can see from the table, the Japanese accounted for more than one-third of the total visitors, which represented 3.2 million in 1975 and 12 million in 2005. China, on the other hand, contributed the less number of visitors, 0.3 and 0.8 million in two years, which only slightly below the amount of USA. As for the remain three areas constituting South Korea, Britain and Europe, started at 2.9, 0.9 and 1.1 million respectively, all had threefold or fourfold growths in 2005.

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The line chart describes the amount of the foreign visitors of to Australia yearly from 1975 to 2005. The table exhibits* the original countries visitors came from and the number of those visitors.

Based on the data provided, annual visits to Australia showed a stable increase while it is Japanese that who travelled to Australia the most.

According to the line graph, started starting from approximately 9 million in 1975, Australia had welcomed 30 million visitors at by the end of the period. Besides In addition*, except between 1985 and 1995 the annual number of visitors grew 10 million, both figures rose 5 million in the first and last decades.

As we can see from the table, the Japanese accounted for more than one-third of the total visitors, which represented 3.2 million in 1975 and 12 million in 2005. China, on the other hand, contributed the less lowest number of visitors, 0.3 and 0.8 million in two years, which was only slightly below the amount of from USA. As for the remain three areas constituting South Korea, Britain and Europe, they started at 2.9, 0.9 and 1.1 million respectively, all had threefold or fourfold growths in 2005.

* I would consider more normal 'shows'. Exhibits is a more dramatic alternative, but not impossible.

1* I prefer 'who' to talk a bout the people reather than the group.

As the aim is to use vocabulary about numbers the text is very successful with lots of appropriate and precise vocabulary.

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