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First notebook entry: Introducing myself
I am Asch. My hometown is a small village by the river in the south of China, but now I'm a Beijinger. By prefession, I am a writer. I love reading and writing when I was a young boy. I am also fond of fishing , swimming1 , and music...but My dream is to write writing some really great poems and novels (and some short stories). Now we have a The community art space in Haidian District, It's is also an artist studio, and a public space area for communication, . It's an art education center tube???, a communtiy library and a chlidren's art gallery. Welcome to and visit us:)
1. Don't put any comma in front of conjunctions such as "and". In your case, redundant. Since you are a writer by profession, here's the link to the controversy of the "Oxford comma". http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Serial_comma and see how you should use or not to use in those examples stated.
Your punctuation indentation is all messed up.
http://www.italki.com/knowledge/page/Mechanics%20Of%20The%20English%20Language.htm
A Short Self-introduction
I am Asch. My hometown is in the south of China,but now I live in Beijing with my family.I was a cartoon writer for many years. It was an awful job, I think.I fell for reading and writing when I was a young boy.My dream is to write great poems,novels and short stories.
This year my wife and I have just created a community art space in Haidian District .It is a non-profit organization.It is also an artist studio,a public space for communication,an art education lab,a community library and a chlidren's art gallery.Welcome and visit us! You can share your stories,your knowledge, your inspirations with many friends .
Blog: www.treedweller.org
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