The second man might be cured of HIV - Writing Challenge Day 8
Today, CNN reported that there might be the second patient to be cured of HIV. The patient, so-called the London patient, had been HIV infected before he was diagnosed with lymphoma. In order to cure lymphoma, he was treated with stem cell transplants. Unexpectedly, after the treatment, without taking any other therapy, he is in HIV remission for a continuous 18 months. It's likely that he was cured of HIV. That's exciting news, it gives hopes to new treatments of HIV.
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The second man might be cured of HIV - Writing Challenge Day 8
Today, CNN reported that the second patient might be cured of HIV. The patient, the so-called London patient, had been HIV infected before he was diagnosed with lymphoma. In order to cure lymphoma, he was treated with stem cell transplants. Unexpectedly, after the treatment, without taking any other therapy, he is in HIV remission for a continuous 18 months. It's likely that he is cured of HIV. That's exciting news, it gives hope to a new treatment for HIV.Very good just the sentence structure in places was not natural.
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The second man that might be cured of HIV - Writing Challenge Day 8
Today, CNN reported that there might be a (It's a person we don't know, so we use the indefinite article "a") second patient to be cured of HIV. The patient, so-called the London patient, had been infected (by HIV) before he was diagnosed with lymphoma. In order to cure lymphoma, he was treated with stem cell transplants. Unexpectedly, after the treatment, without taking any other therapy, he is in HIV remission for a continuous 18 months. It's likely that he was cured (of HIV). That's exciting news. It gives hope to new treatments (of HIV).Remember not to overmention the same detail (which is "HIV"). Use alternative ways of referring to the disease or the virus.
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