Please can you tell me if I wrote this article correctly? Does it seem good to write it as an article ? You can feel free to correct me , I feel like it is short and is not more like an article .

Lina is my ideal person . She is 13 years old . She has got brown eyes and black hair . She is slim and of fair complexion . She wears a blue skirt with a beautiful T-shirt and a bright and comfortable shoes from a famous brand .

Moreover, she is very friendly , sociable , patient, caring , selfless and honest . Sometimes she becomes aggressive and stubborn , but still she is a kind hearted person in my eyes.
She is very interested in sewing, volunteering, travelling, blogging, playing sports and music. She is only a grade 7 student and she currently is not working.

To sum up , I am sure that she is is the best friend of mine and my only ideal person in this life , because she is a unique person . She helps all the people around her and she is always humorous and she is well mannered and that makes her my one and only ideal person

Question

Please can you tell me if I wrote this article correctly? Does it seem good to write it as an article ? You can feel free to correct me , I feel like it is short and is not more like an article  .

Lina is my ideal person . She is 13 years old . She has got brown eyes and black hair . She is slim and of fair complexion . She wears a blue skirt with a beautiful T-shirt and a bright and comfortable shoes from a famous brand .

Moreover, she is very friendly , sociable , patient, caring , selfless and honest . Sometimes she becomes aggressive and stubborn , but still she is a kind hearted person in my eyes. 
She is very interested in sewing, volunteering, travelling, blogging, playing sports and music. She is only a grade 7 student and she currently is not working.

To sum up , I am sure that she is is the best friend of mine and my only ideal person in this life , because she is a unique person . She helps all the people around her and she is always humorous and she is well mannered and that makes her my one and only ideal person

Answer

She wears a blue skirt with a beautiful T-shirt and bright and comfortable shoes by a famous brand .

Sometimes she becomes aggressive and stubborn, but still, she is a kind hearted person in my eyes.

She is only a 7th grade student, so she does not work.

She helps all the people around her and she's always humorous and well mannered. All that makes her my one and only ideal person.

The rest is awesome

Good luck

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This is how I would write it. I hope I didn't change the meaning too much, but I took out some repetition in the last section and shortened a few other sentences.

Lina is my ideal person. She is 13 years old with brown eyes and black hair. She is slim and of fair complexion. She likes to wear a blue skirt with a beautiful T-shirt and shiny comfortable shoes from a famous brand.

Moreover, she is very friendly, sociable, patient, caring, selfless and honest. Sometimes she becomes aggressive and stubborn, but still she is a kind-hearted person in my eyes. 
She is very interested in sewing, volunteering, travelling, blogging, playing sports and music. She is a grade 7 student and is currently not working.

To sum up, she is my best friend and my ideal person because she helps all the people around her, she is always humorous and she is well mannered.

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