Does this sound natural and promising in terms of marketing?

Makkah Sabeel store: building the bridges between (Muslims) and (Makkah/Madinah charities)
to provide you with the blessed Sabeel in hand.

It will be the slogan of my start-up :)

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Does this sound natural and promising in terms of marketing?

Makkah Sabeel store: building the bridges between (Muslims) and (Makkah/Madinah charities)
to provide you with the blessed Sabeel in hand.

It will be the slogan of my start-up :)

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What’s the concept of the brand/business?

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A few points:

As stated, drop the definite article (the).

I would also change 'to provide' with 'and providing you with'

Remove the brackets.

One last point is to use an English word instead of Sabeel. I speak Arabic and am not sure what you mean by Sabeel.

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I like it! The only thing I can say about the motto is that the expression is typically "building bridges" so I think you can drop the "the". Hope it helps and good luck!

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Thanks:)

Sabeel is an Islamic term that means Sadaqah/charity giving

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