I study English in japan,so please help!
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Questions
Leisure is a growing industry, but people no longer entertain themselves as much as they used to because the use of modern technology has made them less creative. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Answer
I disagree with this statement, but part of it I agree. I’m sure that growing technology make our life more creative, on the other hand, people don’t confirm this situation, because they have super wide and deep imagination.Thus,I agree with that people no longer entertain themselves as much as they used, but I disagree with that the use of modern technology has made them less creative.
I explain why people can’t enjoy themselves when they get grown technology. People get grown technology, and they can image everything which they couldn’t image in past, so they can’t usually confirm entertainments which was made in past. Moreover, they seek new entertainments. We experience each areas more and more develop. Therefore, people can’t always enjoy entertainments which already exist.
Why do we feel people less creative? I think this is caused by our lifestyle. If we don’t know anythings, we could search everything by using Internet, when we want to see beautiful view, we can see it on every time and everywhere.These cases teach us we are less active and defensive, so we don’t need to action to everything. The technology is growing, we are less still more creativity by negative and defensive.
Given the above arguments, people definitely seek new entertainments, but they don’t action on it. They are waiting for given it. Nevertheless we got technology which can make our life more creative, but we don’t action. We can’t get creative entertainments unless we action with using technology.
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Questions
Some teachers say students should be organized into groups to study, while others argue that students should be made to study alone.
Tell us benefits of each study method. Which one do you think is more effective?
Answer
I experienced group study and individual study. I like study alone, but I think that group study is more effective than individual study. I pick up some benefits both group and individual study, and explain why I think group study is more effective.
At first, I pick up benefits of group study. First, we can get much variety of opinion and idea. We live and spend time each, so we have different idea and thinking. Thus we naturally get other idea opinion and so on. Second, we can compete with other people for test.This is truly effective way if we would get high score in test, because all people think that don’t want to lose or want to win.Therefore, competition is one of best way to study more effective.
Next,I pick up benefits of individual study.The best benefit I think is concentration. We can concentrate on everything when we are alone, because we are able to create space which is best condition each people think. When we are with someone in same space, we are confused to someone’s action, voice, and existence.
Both ways have benefits, but I’m sure that group study is more effective. We have limit of thinking and idea if we are alone. What we study together is only way this limit is gone. Finally, if we could not concentrate on study when we study together, we should be looking for other people who are quit and study same subject.
