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*** If you can correct my text I would appreciate that very much! Thanks in advance 😊 Theme: You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter say who you are, give details about the accident, suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents. Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Mike, I am your “neighbor” and faithful customer for years. Yesterday, like almost every Monday, I was in your supermarket doing my shopping for groceries. Unfortunately, some small unexpected accident has happened and I’ll try to describe what has happened. It was around 4 p.m. I picked up a basket and started my shopping. Like you now, the first section when someone enters your store is place where you placed fruits and vegetables. I immediately noticed that something was different than usual. Fruits were arranged differently. They were arranged like a pyramid, one above another, not in the boxes like they used to be. When I decided to take an orange, I first looked around from where to take – from the side or from the top of the pile. When I took an orange from the side a whole pile has fallen down! Hundreds of them were on the ground, rolling all around the market. I was so embarrassed. Luckily, no one was hurt because of that action. Immediately one of the workers apologized and started collecting those oranges. To prevent similar accidents I highly recommend you to arrange those oranges in the boxes like it was before. Or to have a worker to help us in that section. Yours sincerely.
11 de fev de 2024 12:18
Respostas · 2
Thank you so much for your effort and encouragement!😎 I put it also in the exercise tab, maybe you haven't noticed 😉
11 de fevereiro de 2024
1. Add "and" before "I am your neighbor." 2. "have been your/a" before "faithful customer" 3. Past tense should be used for the third sentence since the accident has already happened. To avoid repetition, you can say "Unfortunately, some small unexpected accident occurred and I’ll try to describe how it happened." 4. I think you might mean "like you know," not "like you now." 5. "...the first section when someone enters your store is THE place where you PLACE fruits and vegetables." (The corrections are capitalized). 6. "Different than" and "different from" are both commonly used in English, but "different from" is usually considered more correct. 7. "...I first looked around FOR where to take IT FROM" 8. "...a whole pile FELL down" Use the past tense here, not present perfect. This is because the action of falling down has already happened, and it is now over. 9. "action" sounds a little unnatural. Maybe say "Luckily, no one was hurt because of that accident." 10. "I highly recommend you to arrange those oranges in the boxes like it was before, or to have a worker help us in that section." This was great overall! If you'd like more corrections in the future, though, I'd suggest you use italki's "exercise" tab instead of the "questions" tab. The exercise tab lets users correct the paragraph itself instead of just answering in a comment. Nice work here!
11 de fevereiro de 2024
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