The Tim じぁん!!!
It's sunny today. I am over the moon because my mom signed me up for a singing club. There, professional singers will be mentoring me to help me achieve my dream of becoming a singer. This has been a longing of mine for years. After finally persuading Dad, they spent a pretty penny on the tuition. Regardless of the hefty cost, I am confident that I will shine bright and become a star!
2024年4月13日 12:43
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It's sunny today. I am over the moon because my mom signed me up for a singing
club. There, professional singers will be mentoring me to help me achieve my
dream of becoming a singer. This has been a longing of mine for years. After
finally persuading Dad, they (it’s pretty clear this means your parents) spent a pretty penny on the tuition. Regardless of
the hefty cost, I am confident that I will shine brightly (adverb not adjective) and become a star!
Let’s hope so. You will be my first famous friend! 😂
2024年4月13日
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It's sunny today. I am over the moon because my mom signed me up for a singing club.
There, professional singers will mentor me to help me achieve my dream of becoming one too. This has been a longing of mine for years. After
finally persuading Dad, my parents spent a pretty penny on the tuition. Regardless of the hefty cost, I am confident that I will shine bright and become a star!
Very good. The only real mistake was "they" instead of "my parents", the other changes are optional and make your English sound more natural!
2024年4月13日
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