Do they sound natural?

1) I noticed through social media, the deterioration of his appearance, which I thought went hand in hand with the degradation of his life over the course of difficult times.

2) I saw through social media, a decline in his appearance, which I sensed was accompanied by the degradation of his life over the course of difficult times.

Question

Do they sound natural?

1) I noticed through social media, the deterioration of his appearance, which I thought went hand in hand with the degradation of his life over the course of difficult times.

2) I saw through social media, a decline in his appearance, which I sensed was accompanied by the degradation of his life over the course of difficult times.

Answer

Both sentences convey a similar meaning, but they could be improved for clarity and naturalness:

"I noticed on social media that his appearance was deteriorating, and I thought it was linked to the challenges he was facing in his life."

"I observed on social media that his appearance was declining, and I had a sense that it was connected to the difficulties he was experiencing in his life."

These revised sentences sound more natural and easier to understand.

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