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Dear Italki tutors, Would be grateful if you could check my response to IELTS Writing Task 1 question (I struggled a bit with finding synonyms for the words "account for; represent", so I would also be thankful for your advice here) Here is the task (the pic is attached): The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words and my response: The pie charts illustrate demographic information about marital status in Canada and Australia. Overall, while in Canada there are more separated individuals, Australia can boast higher share of married individuals. Single, widowed, and divorced account for smaller proportions in both states. In Canada, separated but not divorced persons make up the lion’s share of the population (53%). Married individuals account for around a third, while the rest of the categories, such as never married, widowed, divorced and in a same sex marriage represent the rest of the population proportions, with the first two being just under 10% and the latter being under 5%. In Australia, married persons constitute the largest share of the population (46%). Meanwhile, separated individuals who did not end up their marriage account for just over 40%. Widowed, single and divorced populations represent the rest 13% of the population, each of them making up 6%, 5% and 2% respectively. Many thanks in advance and have a nice day!
2024年5月29日 14:29
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Dear Italki tutors. I would be grateful if you could check my response to this IELTS Writing Task 1 question (I struggled a bit with finding synonyms for the words "account for; represent", so I would also be thankful for your advice here) Here is the task (the pic is attached): The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words and my response: The pie charts illustrate demographic information about marital status in Canada and Australia. Overall, while in Canada there are more separated individuals, Australia boasts a higher share of married people. The categories single, widowed and divorced account for much smaller proportions in both states. Looking at Canada first, separated but not divorced persons make up the lion’s share of the population (53%). Married individuals account for around a third, while the rest of the categories, such as never married, widowed, divorced and in a same sex marriage represent the rest of the population proportions, with the first two being just under 10% and the latter being under 5%. ( you may as well give the actual %age). Turning to Australia, married persons constitute the largest share of the population (46%). Meanwhile, separated individuals who have not ended their marriage account for just over 40%. Widowed, single and divorced populations represent the remaining 13% of the population, making up 6%, 5% and 2% respectively. Many thanks in advance and have a nice day!
This is very good and there are only a couple of actual mistakes. There is no need to use past tense in this question.
2024年5月31日
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