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is this ok? I'm going to talk in English with my sun. He is 1 y.o. I wrote these texts for myself. Could you write your opinion about my texts. Thk a lot. What's this ? It's a stacking rings (or more correctly is ,,stacking toy,,???). You can sort and stack all six rings. You can stack the rings on the base from biggest to smallest. It's super fun. Let's play. Look at me, I'm taking this ring. A big blue ring has the biggest size. I'm stacking this ring on the base. Now your turn. Take this ring. It is not so big like my ring was (about this sentence- I'm not sure absolutely). Be brave. Try to stake it on the base. You've got it ! Well done! Finally, we need to stake this cat on the top. Let's do it ! Good, we've got it too! The cat is on the top of our stacking rings now. This is your ride on! Look at the front of the ride on! Who's there? Winnie-the-Pooh. A big bear with the honeypot (or pot of honey???). This bear holds a blue arc in his hand. Try to pull it on (or try to pull in it???). do you hear this music? Let's turn the steering wheel! We can also press the horn for beep-beep sounds. You can lift up this seat. Now let's put these balls into the seat storage (is this ,,into,, correct here ?). The balls are putted in safely away now! Press on the Key Button to fire up the vehicle. Press on this blue button to hear a festal music. Now sit on your ride on, please. Let's go for a ride!
2020年3月6日 20:22
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is this ok?


I'm going to speak in English with my son. He is 1 y.o.
I wrote these texts<s> for</s> myself. Can you write your opinion about my texts? Thanks a lot.

What's this ?
They are stacking rings (use "they are" for plural- ring(s)) Could also use stacking toy (not plural)- "It's a stacking toy"
You can sort and stack all six rings.
You can stack the rings on the base from biggest to smallest.
It's super fun.
Let's play.
Look at me, I'm taking this ring.
The big blue ring is the biggest size.
I'm stacking this ring on the base.
Now it's your turn.
Take this ring.
It is not as big as my ring was (about this sentence- I'm not sure absolutely).
Be <s>brave</s> <em>(I dont think brave is an appropriate word here)</em>. Try to stack it on the base.
You've got it !
Well done!<em> </em><em>or</em> Good Job!
Finally, we need to stack this cat on the top.
Let's do it ! Good, <s>we've got it too! </s> not sure about this.... maybe, "We did it too!"
The cat is on the top of our stacking rings now.

I did not have time to help with the other sentences but good job!!!


2020年3月6日
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is this ok?

I'm going to talk in English with my sun. He is 1 y.o.
I wrote these texts for myself. Could you write your opinion about my texts. Thk a lot.

What's this ?
These are stacking rings (or more correctly is ,,stacking toy,,???).
You can sort and stack all six rings.
You can stack the rings on the base from biggest to smallest.
It's super fun.
Let's play.
Look at me, I'm taking this ring.
A big blue ring is the biggest one.
I'm stacking this ring on the base.
Now your turn.
Take this ring.
It is not as big as my ring was (about this sentence- I'm not sure absolutely).
Be brave. Try to stack it on the base.
You've got it !
Well done!
Finally, we need to put this cat on the top.
Let's do it ! Good, we've got it too!
The cat is on the top of our stacking rings now.

This is your ride on!
Look at the front of the ride on!
Who's there? Winnie-the-Pooh.
A big bear with the honeypot (or pot of honey???) - honeypot is great
This bear holds a blue arc in his hand. (What is an arc?)
Try to pull it on (or try to pull in it???).
do you hear this music?
Let's turn the steering wheel!
We can also press the horn for beep-beep sounds.
You can lift up this seat.
Now let's put these balls into the seat storage (is this ,,into,, correct here ?). Correct
The balls are put away safely now!
Press on the Key Button to fire up the vehicle.
Press on this blue button to hear a festal (?) music.
Now sit on your ride on, please.
Let's go for a ride!
2020年3月6日
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