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Ekaterina
Simon Simon was overweight and unfit before he decided to make change. He gave up smoking and started eating and putting on weight more and more. So he decided to start exercising. He remembered that in secondary school he used to enjoy running and thought that may be easy way to get fit. At first it was too difficult for him. He could run only about thirty second and then he walked. But after a while he felt fitter and running became easily for him . As a result Simon lost almost 20 kg. Before this his weight was 98 kg. Now Simon is planning to run a marathon next year.
2020年4月8日 20:02
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Simon

Simon was overweight and unfit before he decided to make a lifestyle change. He gave up smoking, but he started eating, so he continued to put on more and more weight. So, he decided to start exercising several times a weekSimon remembered that in secondary school he used to enjoy running, so he thought that  it may be an easy way to get fit. At first it was too difficult for him. He could run only about thirty seconds before he would have to walk. tBut after a while, he felt fitter, and running became easier for him . As a result, Simon lost almost 20 kg. Before  he weighed 98kg and now he weighed 80 kg ?? Now Simon  is planning to run a marathon next year!
 
 
FYI: Typically we would say unhealthy or out of shape over unfit,  but your sentence is still correct! 
 
Please let me know if you have questions! Have a great day!! 

2020年4月8日
unfit = out of shape (U.S.)
2020年4月9日
Simon

Simon was overweight and unfit before he decided to make a change. He gave up smoking and started eating and putting on more and more weight, so he decided to start exercising. He remembered that in Secondary School he used to enjoy running and thought that may be an easy way to get fit. At first it was too difficult for him. He could only run for about thirty seconds and then he had to walk. But after a while he felt fitter and running became much easier . As a result Simon lost almost 20 kg. Before this his weight was 98 kg. Now Simon is planning to run a marathon next year.

Not a bad effort, some peculiarities in English that I have corrected.
2020年4月8日
Simon was overweight and unfit before he decided to make a change. He gave up smoking and started eating. He eventually started putting on a lot of weight. Because of his weight gain, he decided to start exercising. He remembered that in secondary school he enjoyed running and thought it would be an easy way to get fit. At first it was too difficult for him. He could only run about thirty seconds and then he needed to walk. But after a while, he increased his fitness and running became easier for him. As a result, Simon lost almost 20 kg. Before this his weight was 98 kg. Now Simon is planning to run a marathon next year.
2020年4月8日
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