An English Class Writing (A letter of application) ---> NEEDS CORRECTION :D

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing in response to your advertisement in the Modcaster University News for the part-time courses in English. I want to apply for the "English for FCE" course.

I am 21 years old and have just nearly finished the FCE book which is provided by University of Cambridge. I started learning English when I was 12 but, unfortunately, I don't have an international degree.

I wish to study here because I think the students who had these courses are so qualified and got a good mark in the exam they were trying to get ready for. Besides that, I heard that the atmosphere in your classes is so friendly and the students enjoy that. I believe that when someone enjoys something, they will learn it much better.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Zahra Esmaeilpour

An English Class Writing (a letter of An application letter) ---> NEEDS CORRECTION :D

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing in response to your advertisement in the Modcaster University News for the part-time course in English. I want to apply for the "English for FCE" course.
Nothing wrong with this paragraph but I would write something like this.

I am applying for the "English for FCE" part-time course as advertised in the Modcaster University News.

I am 21 twenty one years of age old and have just nearly finished is almost done with the FCE book which is provided by the University of Cambridge. UNIVERSITY of CAMBRIDGE. I started to learning English when I was twelve 12 but unfortunately don't have did not attain an international degree.

I wish to study here because I think the students who had these courses are so qualified and got a good mark in the exam they were trying to get ready for. Beside that I heard that the atmosphere in your classes is so friendly and the students enjoy that. I believe that when someone enjoy something, they will learn it much better.

Your school has a good reputation in academic excellence and a friendly environment. I am sure I will do well in your institution.

You are long winded in trying to state why you wanted to study there.  Be precise and to the point.  Do not add personal opinions but rather state the facts.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully, Sincerely  You are not a servant!  So don't use faithfully etc.  This is archaic.  "Sincerely" is fine for most purposes.  An attorney may use this because he works for you etc.  He would not use this form he is not in your hire.

Zahra Esmaeilpour

An English Class Writing (a letter of application) ---> NEEDS CORRECTION :D

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing in response to your advertisement in the Modcaster University News for the part-time course in English. I want to apply for the "English for FCE" course.

I am 21 years old and I have almost finished the FCE book which is provided by UNIVERSITY of CAMBRIDGE. I have been learning English since I was twelve years old but, unfortunately, I don't have an international degree.

I would like to study here because I think the students who had these courses are  qualified and got a good mark in the exam they had been trying to get ready for. Also, I heard that the atmosphere in your classes is friendly and the students enjoy that. I believe when someone enjoys something, he will learn it much better.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Zahra Esmaeilpour

An English Class Writing (a letter of An application letter) ---> NEEDS CORRECTION :D

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing in response to your advertisement in the Modcaster University News for the part-time course in English. I want to apply for the "English for FCE" course.
Nothing wrong with this paragraph but I would write something like this.

I am applying for the "English for FCE" part-time course as advertised in the Modcaster University News.

I am 21 twenty one years of age old and have just nearly finished is almost done with the FCE book which is provided by the University of Cambridge. UNIVERSITY of CAMBRIDGE. I started to learning English when I was twelve 12 but unfortunately don't have did not attain an international degree.

I wish to study here because I think the students who had these courses are so qualified and got a good mark in the exam they were trying to get ready for. Beside that I heard that the atmosphere in your classes is so friendly and the students enjoy that. I believe that when someone enjoy something, they will learn it much better.

Your school has a good reputation in academic excellence and a friendly environment. I am sure I will do well in your institution.

You are long winded in trying to state why you wanted to study there.  Be precise and to the point.  Do not add personal opinions but rather state the facts.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully, Sincerely  You are not a servant!  So don't use faithfully etc.  This is archaic.  "Sincerely" is fine for most purposes.  An attorney may use this because he works for you etc.  He would not use this form he is not in your hire.

Zahra Esmaeilpour