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IELTS Task 2 - Topic 1 Topic 3: Some people suggest that schools should ask students to evaluate and criticize their teachers. Others, however, fear that such practice may result in disrespect for teachers and poor discipline in the classroom. Which of the views do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer Nowadays, many people hold the opinion that students should be asked to give comment or criticize their teachers. Although others consider this act may lead to disrespect for teachers and other negative issues, it is my personal belief that students should have a voice in the class. To begin with, it is necessary to let the teachers hear what students’ expectations. In some countries, people merely get used to teacher’s monologue, which means that students normally listen and write without any comments. It is, however, not the most effective way in teaching method. Students will be too passive in their studies as well as their lives. Giving feedbacks is not only the way to help teachers find suitably attractive lecture but also make both be close to each other. Let take teaching language for elementary students as an example. Children easily get bored when their teachers or tutors just teach them grammars. If a child falls asleep or does not pay attention when you teach, it could be considered that you have already failed in communicating with them. Therefore, listening to what students say is essential. However, such practice may result in disrespect for teachers or poor discipline in class as some people concern. Some might think that students are too young to evaluate their teachers. As some concern, students possibly give bad comments or impolite behaviors to teachers. Obviously, overdo anything will lead to unexpected consequences like the issue mentioned above. Accordingly, possible discipline along with students’ feedbacks could control sudden circumstances. In conclusion, schools should ask students to evaluate or criticize teachers in order to not only bring chances to student well approach the lecture but help teachers improve their teaching methods as well.

2012年12月4日 18:29

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IELTS Task 2 - Topic 1

Topic 3: Some people suggest that schools should ask students to evaluate and criticize their teachers. Others, however, fear that such practice may result in disrespect for teachers and poor discipline in the classroom.
Which of the views do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer

Nowadays, many people hold the opinion that students should be asked to give feedback or critiques of their teachers. Although others consider this act may lead to disrespect for teachers and other negative issues, it is my personal belief that students should have a voice in the class.

Comment is countable, so I replaced it with an uncountable noun. It's a little neater that way, considering you have a longer sentence.

To begin with, it is necessary to let the teachers hear what students’ expectations are. In some countries, people merely get used to the teacher’s monologue, which means that students normally listen and write without any comments. It is, however, not the most effective way in teaching method. Students will be become not only passive in their studies, but as well as in their lives as well. Giving feedbacks is not only a way to help teachers find suitably attractive lecture (? I don't understand what you mean) but also make both be close to each other lessen the student-teacher gap. Let's take teaching language to elementary students as an example. Children get bored easily when their teachers or tutors just teach them only grammars. If a child falls asleep or does not pay attention when you teach, it could be considered that you have already failed in communicating with them. Therefore, listening to what students say is essential.

Pay attention to countable and uncountable nouns. Making grammar plural is simply a mistake.

However, such practice may result in disrespect for teachers or poor discipline in class, as some people concern according to the concerns of some people. Some might think that students are too young to evaluate their teachers. As some Others are concerned that, students could possibly give bad comments or show teachers rude impolite behaviors to teachers. Obviously, overdoing anything will lead to unexpected consequences like the issues mentioned above. Accordingly, possible discipline balanced with students’ feedbacks could control unforseen circumstances.

Concern is not an intransitive verb - I had to rewrite the phrase and use it as a noun to give it sense. In most cases, you'll use the passive voice: be concerned.

Remember if a verb is used as a subject, it must be in the gerund form: Overdoing anything will lead to...

In conclusion, I think schools should ask students to evaluate or criticize teachers in order to not only bring chances to student well approach the lecture (? Again, this is jumbled and I don't know exactly what you mean) but help teachers improve their teaching methods as well.

I just made appropriate corrections and suggestions. It was a generally good essay, but there was one small problem which needs to be fixed: try to reword the question in your own words. If you use the exact phrasing from the question, then that's not an indicator of your English skill.

Hope that helps.

2012年12月5日