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my grandma's party today is my grandmother's birthday, and the entire family is happy about that, so, we organized a party for her, and i can see that she is also so happy. (she still dances a lot) I thank god this family is so close, and i hope we always be like that. i have to confess i don't even know how old she is but the only thing i know is i love her.

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My grandma's party

Today is my grandmother's birthday and the entire family is happy about that, so we organized a party for her and I can see that she is also so very happy, (she still dances a lot). I thank God this that our family is so close and I hope we always will be like that.

I have to confess i don't even know how old she is but the only thing I know is I love her.

 

Watch your capitalisation, it is very important in written English. Also I have removed a number of commas. You don't often need a comma before "and".

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My grandma's party

Today is my grandmother's birthday and the entire family is happy about that, so we organized a party for her and I can see that she is also so happy. (she still even dances a lot). I thank God this family is so close and I hope we will always be like that. this.

I have to confess that I don't even know how old she is but the only thing i know is i that I love her. (I eliminated the second "I know" from this sentence as it is repetitive)

Well done Caty!  I agree that you have to pay more attention to using capital letters when required as it is very important in English (unlike in Spanish)

I hope everyone enjoyed the party!

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