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荷塘月色 Moonlight Over The Lotus Pond It is hot, I don"t like staying outside. Now lotuses are blooming and I have been looking forward to appreciate their beauty but I am afraid of the fiery sun. When the sun seted I come to the lotus pond. A full moon mirrored on the lake, the lotuses, the leaves, the moonlight made the picture. Leaves are whirling in the wind. Lotuses are graceful on the water. Swimming fish rouse the golden wave. 天气很热,我不喜欢出门。荷花开了,我早就盼着一睹她的芳容,可是我惧怕外面如火的阳光。等到太阳下山,我来到了莲花池,一轮朗月映在水中,荷花、荷叶、月光构成了这幅画面: 风摆荷叶舞婆娑 芙蓉出水影婀娜 鱼儿游泳湖心过 惊起一池金月波
2013年8月2日 06:50
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荷塘月色 Moonlight Over The Lotus Pond [Excellent translation!]

 

It is hot., I don't [single quote, not double] like staying outside. Now the lotuses are blooming and I have been looking forward to appreciate enjoy their beauty but I am afraid of the fiery sun. When the sun has seted [the past and participle tenses are the same, "set"] I come went to the lotus pond. A full moon mirrored in the lake, [or "on the lake surface"] the lotuses, the leaves, and the moonlight made completed the picture.

Leaves are whirling in the wind.
Lotuses are graceful on the water.
Swimming fish rouse the golden wave.

天气很热,我不喜欢出门。荷花开了,我早就盼着一睹她的芳容,可是我惧怕外面如火的阳光。等到太阳下山,我来到了莲花池,一轮朗月映在水中,荷花、荷叶、月光构成了这幅画面:

风摆荷叶舞婆娑 To and fro, the wind dancing with the lotus leaves,
芙蓉出水影婀娜 Out of the water, lotus shadows so delicate.
鱼儿游泳湖心过 Fishes swiming by, in the heart of the lake,
惊起一池金月波 Alarmed by the broken moon in its golden waves.


Great poem!

2013年8月2日
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