Eugene
Please tell me how to revise this sentence, which is told some mistakes exist. Unfortunately, as the saying goes, "all rose have thorns " , following this philosophy-parenting with sticks come a considerable number of detrimental impacts.
2014年12月18日 11:44
修正 · 5

Please tell me how to revise this sentence, which is told some mistakes exist.

Unfortunately, as the saying goes, "all roses have thorns ".  Following this philosophy, parenting with sticks comes with a considerable number of detrimental impacts.  

 

I suppose that would make the sentence more grammatically correct, but there still isn't a connection between the two statements like Ruthi said.  

2014年12月18日
You could say "all roses have thorns" and that wouldn't be wrong, but people usually say "every rose has its thorn."
2014年12月18日
Thanks a lot. It is abstracted from a composition, I wonder merely if there exist any gramma mistakes. Would you mind correcting the composition for me simultaneously?
2014年12月18日
I would love to correct for you but I am not sure I understand the connection between the two statements. "Roses have thorns" suggests that beauty can be dangerous. When you say "parenting with sticks" are you talking about physical punishment of children? Because if so it is not connected at all to the first sentence.
2014年12月18日
想進步快一點嗎?
加入此學習社群,來試做免費的練習吧!