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Topic: The Advantages and Disadvantages of having a part time job when being a student. As a student, the main task is to study. But besides that, some of the students have a part time job. Now we will discussion about the advantages ang disadvantages when doing a part time job when being a student. There are many advantages when doing a part time job. Firstly, students can make money by working, which supports their family. Secondly, by working, students will have many life experiences. In addition, the experiences which they get, will help them overcome many different situations in life easily. Thirdly, they also have opportunities to contract with many people. Moreover, they will become more happy and active. Besides advantages, there are also many disadvantages of having a part time job. Firstly, it can affect the process of study. Because they spend half of time working . Secondly, if student overworked, it will affect their health. Thirdly, they will have more anxiety and will lose the precious joys of a student. Besides, they also feel more tired and depressed. In conclusion, there are many advantages and disadvantages of having a part time job when being a student. Having a part time job is good, because of many benefits it brings. But student should have a reasonable plan in order to balance between the work and the study.
2015年5月9日 00:08
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Topic: The Advantages and Disadvantages of having a part time job when being a student.

As a student, the main task is to study. But besides that, some of the students have a part time job. Now we will (have) discussion(s) about the advantages ang disadvantages when doing a part time job when being a student. There are many advantages when doing a part time job. Firstly, students can make money by working, which supports their family. Secondly, by working, students will have many life experiences. In addition, the experiences which they get, will help them overcome many different situations in life easily. Thirdly, they also have opportunities to contract with many people. Moreover, they will become more happy and active. Besides advantages, there are also many disadvantages of having a part time job. Firstly, it can affect the process of study. Because they spend half of time working . Secondly, if student overworked, it will affect their health. Thirdly, they will have more anxiety and will lose the precious joys of a student. Besides, they (will) also feel more tired and depressed. In conclusion, there are many advantages and disadvantages of having a part time job being a student. Having a part time job is good, because of many benefits it brings. But student should have a reasonable plan in order to balance between work and the study.

2015年5月9日
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Topic: The Advantages and Disadvantages of having a part time job when being a student.

As a student, the main task is to study. But besides that, some of the students have a part time job. Now we will discuss about the advantages an disadvantages of doing a part time job when being a student. There are many advantages when doing a part time job. Firstly, students can make money by working, which supports their family. Secondly, by working, students will have many life experiences. In addition, the experiences which they get will help them overcome many different situations in life easily. Thirdly, they also have opportunities to come in contact with many people. Moreover, they will become more happy and active. Besides advantages, On the other hand, there are also many disadvantages of having a part time job. Firstly, it can affect the process of study because they spend half of time working . Secondly, if a student is overworked, it will affect their health. Thirdly, they will have more anxiety and will lose the precious joys of a student. Besides, they also feel more tired and depressed. In conclusion, there are many advantages and disadvantages of having a part time job when being a student. Having a part time job is good, because of many benefits it brings. But student should have a reasonable plan in order to balance between the work and the study.

 

<em>[Very good.  I changed some of the more complex phrases.]</em>

2015年5月9日
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