please someone check my grammar
My favourite movie is two states . It's about Krish and Anannya . Krish was a Punjabi boy from Delhi and Annaya was south indian beautiful girl from Chennai . They both went to IIM Ahmedabad for MBA and one day while sharing lunch they become friends. They spent two years together and deeply fall in love with each other but never shared their feelings officially.. after two years they both wanted to have best job in best companies . . They went for the interview but Krish wasn't able to concentrate on his interview cause Anannya was on his head all the time .. so he desided to propose her . And he did it at the middle of her interview ..and she said yes.
To take their relationship in a new label they wanted to make their parents meet with each other.but it didn't worked well cause they both didn't like eachother and they were from different states . their everything was different .
Anannya wanted the both families to be happy in the marriage so they desided to impress each other's family.
KRISH west to Chennai , started to give Anannya's brother IIT tution . Helped her father with some office work and also gave her mother an opportunity to perform on stage .and finally Krish proposed 4 of them with a golden ring to marry him .. they were impressed by him .
Now it was Anannya's turn to impress his family. She went to Delhi and attached a marriage function with krishe's family and there she saved the marriage from braking and became a hero for their family.
On Other side Krish Never had a good relationship with his father. And it was time to meet both the family.so they all went for a vacation. But they had some conflict and as a result they broke up .
Both were not happy with the thing . Krishe's father noticed the thing and secretly went to Chennai to visit Anannya's family .. he apologized for conflict and everything. And spent a whole day with Anannya's family.
They very next day Anannya called Krish and they patchup .. finally everyone was happy .they got married and now they have two kids.
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please someone check my grammar
My favourite movie is two states. It's about Krish and Anannya . Krish was a Punjabi boy from Delhi and Annaya was a south indian beautiful girl from the southern India, Chennai . They both went to IIM Ahmedabad for MBA and then one day while sharing lunch they become friends why sharing lunch together. They spent two years together and deeply fall fell in love with each other but never shared their feelings officially. After two years, they both wanted to have get the best job in the best companies company . . They went for the interview but Krish wasn't able to concentrate on his interview cause because he couldn't stop thinking about Anannya, hence he desided to propose her. He proposed her at the middle of the interview and she accepted his propose.To take their relationship in a new label In order to develop the deeper and closer relationship, they was supposed to have a meeting between parents from two sides. However, it ended up failure owing to the difference of culture backgrounds and so on.
Anannya wished they feel better, specially during the wedding party.
KRISH went to Chennai and gave Anannya's brother IIT tution. He tried to helpe her father in terms of office works and also gave her mother an opportunity to perform on stage. Finally, Krish proposed 4 of them with a golden ring to marry him.
Now it was Anannya's turn to give a good immpresion to his family. She went to Delhi and attached a marriage function with krishe's family and there she saved the marriage from braking and became a hero for their family. - Sr i don't understand what u means
They went on a holiday but they had some conflict and as a result they broke up
Both were not happy with theỉ ending. Krishe's father noticed the thing and secretly went to Chennai to visit Anannya's family. He apologized for conflicts and what happened. He has spent a whole day with Anannya's family.
On the next day, Anannya called Krish and they patchup ??? finally everyone was happy. They got married and now have two kids.
In my opinion, u need to learn how to use marks like , . It's simple but can messes up ur sentence easily. Don't using "and" to begin the sentence, if u just write an informal essay, it's ok. U can use furthermore/ moreover/ in addition/ additionally, these phrases improve ur sentence significantly. I didn't watch this movie so i don't really understand the whole story from what you've written. Overally, good efforts!!!!!!
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