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Alberto Rodríguez
Could you please correct any mistake, please? My dream travel is going to Paris to know the Eiffel tower, and getting to the top. I would like to go there in Christmas, take many photos and eat French typical food. Also, I would like to do a tour around Paris. That has been my dream since I was 7 years old. I’d go with my whole family to make it funnier. I would stay there 20 days, I love long trips. After going to France, I would go to Rome-Italy to visit the coliseum. That is an amphitheater that began to be built in the 70s and it was finished in the year 80 The Fontana di Trevi is one of the most famous and monumental fountains of Italy, created in the year 1732 and the Vatican museum. Then, I'd go to Pisa to visit the Pisa tower. The typical food of Italy that I would like to eat are macaroni, pizza, lasagna, and for desserts I'd like to eat tiramisu and cannoli. After going to Pisa, it would great to go to Venice and visit the Rialto Bridge, the ducal palace of Venice that is one of the symbols of the glory and power of Venice and Santa Maria de Salute church. In Italy I would stay 15 days to make a total trip of 35 days. I would like to visit those places because they seem to be very nice and I like the culture of the people who live there.

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Could you please correct any mistake, please?

My dream trip is going to Paris to see the Eiffel tower, and going to the top. I would like to go there in Christmas, take many photos and eat typical french food. Also, I would like to do a tour around Paris. That has been my dream since I was 7 years old. I’d go with my whole family to make it more fun (funnier is like 'haha', more fun is the correct way to say 'funner'). I would stay there 20 days because I love long trips. After going to France, I would go to Rome (Italy) to visit the Colosseum. It is an amphitheater that was started in the 70s and it was finished in the year 80 (this sentence is kind of confusing.  70 BC?)


The Trevi Fountain is one of the most famous and monumental fountains of Italy.  It was created in the year 1732 along with the Vatican museum. Then, I'd go to Pisa to visit the Leaning Tower of Pisa. The typical Italian food that I would like to try is macaroni, pizza, lasagna, and for desserts I'd like to eat tiramisu and cannoli. After going to Pisa, it would great to go to Venice and visit the Rialto Bridge and the ducal palace of Venice. It is one of the symbols of the glory and power of Venice along with the Santa Maria de Salute church. In Italy I would stay 15 days to make a total trip of 35 days. I would like to visit those places because they seem to be very nice and I like the culture of the people who live there.

Alberto - looks great!  A couple things I changed were 'and' to 'along with'.  Some of your sentences were kind of long so I tried to split them up. Good job :)



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