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About millitaty leaders of Japan Oda Nobunaga, Toyotomi Hideyoshi and Tokigawa Ieyasu are the most famous history person of Japan as Daimyo . Japanese called Daimyo as military leader Of Japan. About 400 years ago At first, Nobunaga grew up to become a daimyo .However Nobunaga was betrayed and killed by one of Nobunaga’s retainer who named Akechi Mitsuhide. After his death, Hideyoshi became have power. But After the death of Toyotomi Hideyoshi, The Battle of Sekigahara occurred and Ieyasu won the battle. In the end, Ieyasu unified Japan. He established the Edo shogunate in 1603 as well. the Edo period lasted about 260 years.
2018年10月3日 12:24
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About military leaders of Japan.

Oda Nobunaga, Toyotomi Hideyoshi and Tokigawa Leyasu are the most famous people in Japanese history, as Daimyo. Japanese referred to Daimyo as a military leader of Japan.


About 400 years ago, at first, Nobunaga grew up to become a Daimyo, however Nobunaga was betrayed and killed by one of Nobunaga’s retainer soldiers who was named Akechi Mitsuhide. After his death, Hideyoshi came into power. But After the death of Toyotomi Hideyoshi, The Battle of Sekigahara occurred and Leyasu won the battle. In the end, Leyasu unified Japan. He established the Edo shogunate in 1603 as well. The Edo period lasted about 260 years.


Hi, hope this helps :) A few notes if necessary, the notes in red aren't exactly wrong but about isn't a word we'd start a sentence with, neither is but. Retainer isn't exactly wrong grammatically but in the context it doesn't make sense. I've helped you to make it more sensible :) Important figures will always start with a capital letter, so Leyasu, as well as the start of any sentence.


Interesting to know though :)  

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