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Dora
About hobby When I became a mother, I began to think more about life. Such the hobbies. I would like to focus on the following issues. 1. Why do we should have hobbies? Having a hobby will make you more interesting. You can have fun in your hobbies and pass them on to the people around you. You can also tell them some stories about your hobbies. Have a hobby that will help you in your social life and connect with others. Hobbies are things you can often enjoy with others. Whether you're joining a club or making new friends, hobbies are a great way to get to know and get close to people who share your interests. Let you increase your expectations and excitement about life. Hobbies help reduce or eliminate boredom. When you find that you have extra time and nothing to do, they will give you something to do. Get rid of bad habits. If you have a good hobby to fill in your free time, you are unlikely to waste it or spend it on negative activities. So hobbies have many benefits, we better have hobbies. 2. Why do some of us have no hobbies? Your life is difficult and requires a lot of time for repetitive work. I think this is a big factor in the loss of a person's hobby. When you need to spend a lot of time doing uncreative work, you don't have the energy to develop your hobbies. And once you don't develop your hobby, your hobby slowly becomes no longer your hobby. Living environment. If people around you have no hobbies, you may also be affected. The reason is that you may not find someone to communicate with. It may also be that your hobby cannot be appreciated by everyone. Even if you have the time, the energy, the financial resources to develop your hobbies, but still can't lose them because you can't stick to it. 3. Types of Hobbies? Sing Painting Dancing Drama Origami Playing an Instrument Photography Cooking Reading Magic Sports ……. 4. How to develop your hobbies? Hobbies are not what you like, so you will be able to stick to it until you have learned very well. Some hobbies are just as difficult as your other studies. If you want to be very good at something, you need to put a lot of effort into it. 5. What should we do to develop our children's hobbies as parents? When we find that children are particularly interested in something, we should do everything we can to help them improve their skills. And encourage the children when they are frustrated and work with them to solve the difficulties. Let them develop their hobbies better.
2019年2月20日 07:30
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Hey there, Dora,


Here are my suggested changes for your text (an 'X' represents an incorrect sentence, whereas asterisks '***' represent a strange-sounding or ambiguous sentence):


1. (X) I began to think more about life. Such the hobbies.

--> I began to think more about life, which led me to hobbies. // I began to think more about life, a big part of which are our hobbies.


2. (X) Why do we should have hobbies?

--> Why should we have hobbies? 


3. (***) Have a hobby that will help you in your social life and connect with others. 

--> Have a hobby that will help you in your social life and make it easier to connect with others. // Have a hobby that will help you grow in your social life and connect with others. 


4. (X) Let you increase your expectations and excitement about life. 

--> Hobbies let you increase your expectations and excitement about life. // Increase your expectations and excitement about life by taking up a hobby!


5. (X) So hobbies have many benefits, we better have hobbies.

--> So hobbies have many benefits; we'd better have hobbies. ("we'd better" = "we had better")


6. (***) And once you don't develop your hobby, your hobby slowly becomes no longer your hobby.

--> And once you've stopped developing your hobby, it slowly fades away/withers/dies/diminishes.


7. (X) Even if you have the time, the energy, the financial resources to develop your hobbies, but still can't lose them because you can't stick to it.

--> Even if you have the time, the energy, and the financial resources to develop your hobbies, it is still possible to lose them by not sticking to them. (The main problem with your sentence was the incorrect combination of the logical connectors "even if...but," which are not used together.)


8. (***) Hobbies are not what you like, so you will be able to stick to it until you have learned very well.

--> Hobbies are not always enjoyable, so you will need to stick to them until you have learned them very well.



9. (***) Let them develop their hobbies better.

--> Help them develop their hobbies better. (The problem with 'let' is that it make the parent sound very passive -- like a person whose goal is simply to 'not be an obstacle' as their child develops hobbies. I believe that 'help' paints a more active picture of the parent.)


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Best,


Ross

2019年2月21日
Hi Ross, it's OK. Thank you for letting me know about it.
2019年2月21日
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2019年2月21日
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