搜尋自 英語 {1} 教師……
Marishka
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我喜欢夏季。天气常常很晴天。夏季我能吃浆果。我最喜欢的浆果是草莓因为太天甜和香了。夏季我跟我的奶奶住。我会游泳就许多学外语,画画儿,看书。
2020年6月4日 11:53
解答 · 6
Your Chinese is already pretty good!Congratulation!I can understand your meaning and your minor mistakes gives me some possible imaginations. Let me tell you some points, ok?
1. 天气常常很晴天。If I were you, I will rephrase it as 天气常常很晴朗。That means There are akways sunny days.
2. 我最喜欢的浆果是草莓因为太天甜和香了。 First of all, thare is a comma missing between 草莓and 因为, that would make the sentense clear. Secondly, by 天甜, I guess you mean "sweet", which is 甜 in Chinese. Since 天 and 甜 has the same pronunciation but in different tone, so it is easy to mess it up. Thirdly, as a native speaker, I will say the sentence like this:我最喜欢的浆果是草莓,因为它又甜又香。Adding 它 in the sentence makes the pointing clearly, and the pattern of又……又 makes it fluently. It is quite similar to "not only……but also".
3. Your last sentence confuses me. I guess you're trying to say that you can go out to swim, and you learn how to speak a foreign language. You have time to paint and read. Of course, if my guessing is wrong, please let me know so I can answer you question better. So based on my guessing, the sentence should be 我会游泳,我学外语,画画儿和看书。Don't forget the 和, that's "and" in Chinese, and when listing three things, we put 和 in front of the third item.It's quite similar to the usage of "and".
So that's all my opinions. I have seen many answers below, they all have great points. Hope you learn well and have fun!
2020年6月13日
我觉得涛的回答很好了,解释的很好。但是我想补充一点,浆果这个词,可能是外国人喜欢说,在中国就说水果,我记得好像浆果这个统称里面还包含蔬菜类的东西。另外,坚果是另一大类。
2020年6月5日
我喜欢夏季。天气常常很好。夏季我能吃浆果。我最喜欢的浆果是草莓因为太甜和太香了。夏天我跟我的奶奶住。我会游泳,学许多的外语,画画儿,看书。
2020年6月5日
不错哦!你的中文还可以更大程度的提升!
2020年6月4日
我喜欢夏季。(总起句)(补充:因为夏天;补充原因:加上原因会更加通顺)的天气常常很(更正:都是;修改原因:很不能修饰名词,只能修饰形容词)晴天。夏季我能(更改:能)吃浆果。我最喜欢的浆果是草莓,因为太天甜和香(改正:因为太香甜;修改原因:词语使用不当)了。夏季(补充:的时候)我(补充:会)跟我的奶奶住。(补充:在夏天)我会游泳就许多学外语(修改:我会游泳,学习外语),画画儿,看书,(补充:我最喜欢夏天了!修改原因:承上启下,让全文更加完整)
修改后:我喜欢夏季。因为夏天的天气常常是晴天。而且夏季我能吃到我最喜欢的浆果:草莓,因为它太香甜了。夏季的时候我会跟我的奶奶住在一块。在夏天我还会游泳,学习外语,画画儿,看书。我太喜欢夏天了!
2020年6月4日
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