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Urgent Question HELP! Hi! Everyone, I need my english article to be corrected ASAP! I would really really appreciate if you could help me!! Thanks! I think in the history human beings have been shifting what they could do to outer devices a lot. That enables human beings to do more work (actually incredible amount of work when I think about computers and other electronic devices) in a short period of time. However, the different way of seeing the same phenomena is that human beings replaced their own ability of doing things to the outer world. In addition, when human beings replaced their own ability to do something to outer machine or devices, often times it seems that they lose their ability, not completely, but in a very rapid and great degree. Simplest example is that I think I lost my ability to calculate after I started to use calculator and computer in daily basis. This event reminds me of law of the conservation of energy. When something else in the outer world replaced human inner ability to accomplish work, (thus stop exerting inner source), human being is losing that ability. I did some thought experiment, and generalized this phenomena to medicines. If I took a medicine when I felt stomach wired, and the medicine worked, that means the medicine did its work to heal my stomach. However, it might mean at the same time that I was losing my ability to heal my stomach using my inner power of haling. That sounds like I am not getting stronger but weaker in terms of natural healing power. Thus, there was a gain and lost according to law of the conservation of energy.

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I think that, throughout history, human uses of  technology has changed greatly. Technology enables us to do more work, an incredible amount of work when you consider computers and other electronic devices. In just a short period of time, we have witnessed the same phenomena in new ways. We have replaced our own ability to complete certain tasks in the outside world. In addition, when we humans are replaced kn our ability to do something by machines or computers, it often seems that we lose that skill. We do not forget it completely, but certainly to a great degree. One simple example is my feeling that I have lost my ability to calculate after I started to use calculator and computer on a daily basis. Such occurrences remind me of the law on the conservation of energy. When something else replaces a human's latent ability to accomplish work, they stop exerting their minds and we lose those abilities. I did some thought experiments and compared this phenomena to medicine. If I took medicine when my stomach churned, and the medicine worked, that means the medicine did its job in curing my stomach pain. However, it might mean that, at the same time,  My body is losing the ability to heal the stomach with its own power. It is as if I am not getting stronger but weaker, in terms of my natural healing ability. Thus, there was no gain nor loss, akin to to the law on the conservation of energy.

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It is for school but not for a paper. it is kind of like online discussion and i m posting my idea. Thanks!!! BTW, it is not offence or my disagreeing with technology, but more like my finding or genuine observation of what's going on when humans invent something new and useful. I m aftaid my lack of english make this article sound offencive. Is this article okay enough?
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But first I want to ask, what is this article for? Because if it is for school or work then I'll correct it more harshly. However, if for something less important than I'll won't try to do correct too harsh.
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I can do it!!!

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