Overall it was written very well! I edited it a bit to match a more native way of saying speaking. At the end of your first paragraph you said “I live sunny days.” I’m not sure if you meant to say “I love sunny days” (which would be correct) but I changed it to “I live for sunny days.” To say “I live for....” is an expression used in English (at least in the United States by younger people) to express something you really really like

You are doing good. Keep practicing and you will improve over period of time. There’s nothing wrong in the way you wrote and people can understand your message, end of the day that’s what languages do. Gracias 🙏.