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Could you correct my English? Young people enjoy life more than older people. I agree with this idea that young people enjoy life more than older people do. First, young people have strong bodies. The older people get, the weaker their bodies are. So older people are not able to do some of experiences which need physical fittness. For instance, long flight needs healthy bodies. To travel from Tokyo to Los Angels, it takes over twelve hours. If people are sick or use some medical equipments, it is hard to spend time in plane for a long hours. Also they must find a local hospitals which correspond to their diseases in other countries when something happens to them. Usually young people are fine so that they can try to do most of things which they are interested in. Second, young people have a lot of chances. There are a lot of programs to support young people. Some of programs are free or cheaper for young peopler. For example, most young people don't have money, so most of them, especially students, have a part time job to earn money for their dreams or hobbies. Even though they try to get amount of money, money is not enough to realize their dreams. Some companies have programs to cheer that kind of young people up. One of the programs I know is a Tobitate program. It is a schorship for people under 30 years old. On this program companies which are interested in young people's dream pay money for them. One of my friends really wanted to go abroad to help people in asian countries. She applied to this program and passed it. Now she is working to change the poor conditon in asian countries. That is why I think young people can be sartisfied with thier life.

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Could you correct my English?

Young people enjoy life more than older people.

I agree with this idea that young people enjoy life more than older people do.
First, young people have strong bodies. The older people get, the weaker their bodies are. So older people are not able to do some of the experiences which need physical fittness. For instance, long flights need healthy bodies. To travel from Tokyo to Los Angels, it takes over twelve hours. If people are sick or use some medical equipment, it is hard to spend time in a plane for long hours. Also they must find a local hospital which corresponds to their diseases in other countries when something happens to them. Usually young people are fine so that they can try to do most of the things which they are interested in.
Second, young people have a lot of chances. There are a lot of programs to support young people. Some of programs are free or cheaper for younger people. For example, most young people don't have money, so most of them, especially students, have a part time job to earn money for their dreams or hobbies. Even though they try to get any amount of money, it is not enough to realize
their dreams. Some companies have programs to cheer that kind of young person up. One of the programs I know is a Tobitate program. It is a schorship for people under 30 years old. On this program companies which are interested in young people's dream pay money for them. One of my friends really wanted to go abroad to help people in asian countries. She applied to this program and passed it. Now she is working to change the poor conditon in asian countries.
That is why I think young people can be sartisfied with their life.
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