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Being famous or Being Successful but not so well known In the past being famous was synonym of being successful because to reach fame you had to work hardly and above all you have to be very, very good AT what you do. People WHO ARE stars BECAME famous thanks TO their skills and the way they did it. you didn't need to be envolved in scandals or to be talking bad things about someone. Nowadays being famous is the fondest dream for common people.they don't mind doing to reach fame. for example, they appear on tv doing and talking nonsenses, Despite the advantages of being famous by earning a lot of money or getting special treatment wherever you go.you would never have enough privacy to go out with your friends. PAPARAZZI IS always following you with a camera taking YOUR photos. On the other HAND, being successful but not so well known has many advantages. for example, to have enough privacy to live peacefully or to have ENOUGH time to set up your own projects freely without any sort of pressure from STRANGERS. You always are available to go out with your friends,walking and going to THE cinema. to sum IT up, i prefer to be succesful but not so well KNOWN because you don't need to be famous for having money, i believe that despite of the money you can reach happiness, being succesful and having a normal life WITH YOUR family and FRIENDS and not being famous
16. Jan. 2013 01:26
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Being famous or Being Successful but not so well known


In the past being famous was synonym of being successful because to reach fame you had to work hardly and above all you had have to be very, very good at what you do. (you do not need very twice, becuase very is an emphasis)


People who are stars became famous thanks to their skills and how they used them
You don't need to be envolved involved in scandals or to be talking about bad things about someone.

Nowadays being famous is the fondest dream for common people. They don't mind doing anything to reach fame. For example, they appear on tv doing and talking about nonsenses, despite having the advantages of being famous, by earning a lot of money, or getting special treatmentWherever you go you would will never have enough privacy to go out with your friends. The paparazzi IS will always following you with a camera taking your photos.

On the other hand you can be successful, but not being as so well known has many advantages also. For example, you will to have enough privacy to live peacefully, or to have enough time to set up your own projects freely without any sort of pressure from strangers. You are always available to go out with your friends, walking, or and going to the cinema.

To sum it up, I prefer to be succesful but not so well known because you don't need to be famous to for having have money. I believe that despite of having the money you can reach happiness, being succesful, and having have a normal life with your family and friends and not being famous.

 

Capitalizing words should not be overly used for emphasis (most academic writers would say do not use them at all).  Some of the corrections I made were to make the sentences flow better. 


Remember anytime you have a series of verbs or nouns you need to use a comma between them and an and/or/nor before the last item in the series.  Example: I believe you can have money by being fair, sucessful, and generous. 

24. Januar 2013
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