Hi Lynn,

This is a nice story. I hope these corrections are helpful:

There was a little girl who was born into a poor family. Her mother became ill.

(There are many ways to express this. I am just choosing one that sounds common.)

Before Christmas, her mother gave her one dollar to buy a small gift for herself.

She took the money, but she didn't know what one dollar could be used for.

She intended to ask for a doctor for her mother, but it was so expensive that she [was watching a game at this time.] 不知道这是什么意思。我来猜：decided to bet the money on a game.

In this game if you would guess the right letter, you would win ten times what you had bet.

The little girl thought for a moment and decided to try.

She put her dollar on the letter L and won 10 dollars, then put that ten dollars on O and won 100 dollars, then put everything on V and won 1000 dollars, and finally the same on E to win 10,000 dollars.

She asked for a doctor for her mother with the money.

[The boss] was shocked. He couldn't understand why the girl had such good luck. 我不清楚the boss是谁。可能是The man running the game

When he finally put all the letters together, he realized the girl had made a bet with love.

If we have love in our hearts, we are braver and can defeat any difficulty.