The city where I was born.

I'm from Colombia and I was born in Bogota, the capital of my country. It is a very crowded city, our transportation system is a little bit innefficient but it's good. so you It's complicated to go from one place to another one. The most important places in my city Citiy are Monserrate, this is a church on the top of a mountain, it's really nice and beautiful, from there you can see the whole city, we also we have a very tall high building, it's called The Colpatria Tower, it's the highest building in the city. I don't remember how many meters it is, but it's really high. Another great place is it's the Simon Bolivar Park, basically, it's a very big park with a big lake in the middle, where you can drive a boat. The last one place I want to mention talk is an attractions park, it's called Salitre Magico, it's not so big but it have has some very fun attractions, I very much like so much going there.

The city where I was born.

I'm from Colombia and I was born in Bogota, the capital of my country. It is a very crowded city, our transportation system is little bit inefficient but it's good, so you it's complicated going from one place to another one. The most important places in my city are Monserrate, this is a church in the top of a mountain. It's really nice and beautiful - from there you see the whole city. Also we have a very high building, it's called The Colpatria tower. It's the highest building in the city. I dont remember how many meters it is, but it's really high. Another great place is  the Simon Bolivar park. Basically, it's a very big park with a big lake in the middle, where you can drive a boat. The last one place I want to talk is an attractions park, it's called Salitre Magico. It's not so big but it has some very fun attractions. I like so much go there.

[Good job.  You need work on separating complete concepts into separate sentences.]