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Obsevation summary • Identifying possible topics based upon observations, multiple topics/predictions may be identified. Based upon 20 minutes, I would say the possible topics are hunting games, a baby, a bed time, seasonal songs. • Number of children involved There were three children involved with the girl who I was tracking at the observation. • Conversations amongst the children Through the conversations between the girl B and her friend who was working on making Christmas cards, she showed her sympathy. She said to the friend about the child who was absent due to sickness, so therefore she made one for her. • How teachers were supporting the play The teachers set the environment up before the children came to the center. • How the environment facilitated the play There were Christmas theme or winter theme activities on the tables such as shiny blue snow dough, shaving cream and baking powder sensory table, and making a Christmas cards table. The children naturally would learn about Christmas and winter.

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Observation summary

Identifying possible topics based upon observations, multiple topics/predictions may be identified.
Based upon 20 minutes, I would say the possible topics are hunting games, a baby, a bed time, seasonal songs.

I'm not sure exactly what you are trying to say here, sorry. Do you mean something like this?

Multiple topics can be identified from observations. Based on 20 minutes of observation, I would say that the possible topics to observe are playing games [I'm not sure what you mean by hunting.], [what do you mean by 'a baby'?], bedtime, and singing seasonal songs.


Number of children involved
There were three children involved with the girl who I was tracking at the observation.
There were three children involved with the girl that I was observing.


Conversations amongst the children
Through the conversations between the girl B and her friend, who was working on making Christmas cards, she showed her sympathy.

It would be more natural to say though:
Girl B demonstrated sympathy in her conversation with her friend as they made Christmas cards.


She said to the friend about the child who was absent due to sickness, so therefore she made one for her.
She spoke to her friend about another child who was absent due to sickness and then decided to make a card for her.

How teachers were supporting the play
The teachers set the environment up before the children came to the center.


How the environment facilitated the play
There were Christmas theme or winter theme activities on the tables such as shiny blue snow dough, shaving cream and baking powder sensory table, and making a Christmas cards table.

There was a Christmas or winter theme for activites on the tables. Sensory activities used shiny blue snow dough, shaving cream, and baking powder. There was also a table for making Christmas cards.

 

The children naturally would learn about Christmas and winter.


Well done! :)
This seems like a challenging thing to write about. Are you studying psychology or sociology?

I've reformatted your post as it was hard to read. Normally we use bullet points (•) for separate sentences in a list, and not for titles. If you underline titles or make them bold it makes it easier to identify the structure of your writing as well.

I hope that I've not been too critical. I was uncertain how to correct your first paragraph, but I think this is due to the difficulty of translating scientific or childcare terms.

Your spelling is perfect. :)

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