The good game

Hello, my friends. I want to tell you about such an interesting thing. It is Assassin's Creed part two.
I had played in the first part, but I could not finish it. Before this game I had played Bioshock Infinity (sorry, I don't know how to correctly write the name of game*) and I love it.
I don't know what I can write yet. I'm really sorry about my mistakes.

Very well written! Please use more pronouns.

*or, ...know how to correctly write it

A good game

Hello my friends. I want to tell you about a really interesting game called Assassin's Creed part two.
I have played the first part, but I haven't been able to finish the entire game. Before having played this one, I had played Bioshock Infinity (sorry, I don't know the correct spelling of the name) and I love it.
I don't know what I can write now. I'm really sorry about my mistakes.

The good game

Hello, my friends.I want tell you about such interesting things, like Assassin's Creed part two.
I have played in the first part,but I can't finished this  the game.Before this the game, I had played Bioshock Infinity(sorry,I don't know how to correctly write the name of game) and I love this game.
I don't know what I can write yet. I'm really sorry about my mistakes

 

Great job writing. It's really good!