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Can you see some mistakes in this essay? (grammatical or context)
The young can learn a lot about life from older people. Do you agree?Over the time; time is now indefinite
it says HAS BEEN SAID; present perfect, saying is now spread over indefinite past time up to present
that older people have a big knowledge based on experiences which they have had in all their life.
Nowadays young people have different attitudes when they have problems or take some decisions, so the
way of see SEEING
the possible answer is totally different with respect to past generations. Due to technology such
a AS THE internet,
resolve RESOLVING a problem
could be easier than in the past, so we would say that in the present young people have more possitive attitudes because the information to find an answer is in general easier using the tools like internet.
But is it true that internet can provide all? Despite all the information on internet,
it says IS SAID (passive, impersonal, unknown "sayer")
that experience always win and for this reason young can learn a lot about life from older people isomuch (INSOMUCH) as they have enough experience and knowledge in different branches they won through their life.
To sum up, I agree that older people can teach you many things and you can complete this information using the new technology. In every way that you want learning, experiences from older people are so important for having a big concept of the life.
(NICE PRESENTATION OF YOUR IDEA. I IGNORED MINOR SPELLING ERRORS. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK)
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