Watershed
I drove around mountainous area in very central part of Japan last weekend. When I got at a foot of a mountain, I encountered a watershed. That was my first time to see it. I felt greatness of nature by just staring at a small stone monument. Of course Japan is a small island, but still I could feel natural wonder. Imagine if one drop of rain touch the land and goes to right. It eventually reaches Pacific Ocean. If it goes to left, it running down to Japan See. 180 degree of direction. That is watershed is all about. It is only a sheer chance which direction it could go. It makes people pondering what lives they have talked. I am also the one.
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Watershed
I drove around a mountainous area in very the central part of Japan last weekend. When I got at a the foot of a mountain, I encountered a watershed. That was my the first time to see it I had seen one. I felt greatness the awesomeness of nature by just by staring at a small stone monument. Of course Japan is a small island, but still I could feel natural wonder. Imagine if one drop of rain touched the land and goes to right. It eventually reaches Pacific Ocean. If it goes to left, it running down to the Japan See Sea. 180 degrees, of direction one way or the other. That is what watershed is all about. It is only a sheer chance which direction it a drop of water could go. It makes people pondering what lives they have talked walked. I am also the one of them.Noritoshi-san, This is really nice.
A couple notes: I changed "greatness" to "the awesomeness." English speakers use the word "awesome" way too often, but this is a case where it is appropriate. You felt a sense of awe at that place.
"The lives they have talked" - I can't decide if that's wrong or not. We don't "talk" lives. We sort of "walk" lives, though.
You have a lot of really nice word choices and phrases. Most of the corrections I made are just suggestions, choices. がんばりましょう。
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Watershed
I drove around a mountainous area in a very central part of Japan last weekend. When I got at a to the (or arrived at the) foot of a the mountain, I encountered a watershed. That (or it) was my first time to see it one. I felt the greatness of nature by just by staring at a small stone monument. Of course Japan is a small island, but still I could feel natural wonder. Imagine if one drop of rain touch the land falls to the ground and goes to the right. It eventually reaches Pacific Ocean. If it goes to the left, it running runs down to Japan See the Sea of Japan. 180 degrees (of difference) of direction. That is what a watershed is all about. It is only a sheer random chance which direction it could go (works, but "it is only random chance that determines which direction the raindrop goes" sounds better). It makes people, including me, pondering what lives they have talked the direction their lives have taken. I am also the one.A very interesting paragraph! I had never thought about watersheds like that, and I think I picked up some of your wonder. Language-wise, the main thing I noticed was the lack of articles (a, the). Cool pic!
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