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The graphs show the consumption of water across different regions of our planet. It can clearly be seen, that Europe and North America, being the most industrialized regions, use the majority of water consumed for industrial purposes. Differently, Africa, Central Asia and Southeast Asia use most of their water for agriculture and just a small percentage for domestic use. The two western regions (Europe and North America) have similar patterns in water consumption. They use half of their water consumption for industrial purposes, and approximately just 15% for domestic use.
Also, Africa and Central Asia show a similarity, using most of their water for agriculture. In addition, Southeast Asia shows a slightly greater percentage in industrial use even though it is not comparable with Europe and North America. Overall, there is a huge disproportion in the water being consumed between the different regions analyzed, reflecting the different respective economic conditions in each region.
Overall Giulio, I think you did well describing the graphs and your explanations and comparisons were well thought out. I did note, however, some spelling mistakes, along with grammatical mistakes mainly the use of commas (,) and word choice. If you have any questions, please let me know! If you would like help to practice and improve your English, I'd be happy to help you!
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