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JUST A DIARY ON FEB.28TH I want someone to correct my diary. Could you do that for me, please? JUST A DIARY ON FEB.28TH At last, I quit my part-time jobs which I have been worked for about 4 years yesterday at night. I'm really sad so bad because I was excited to do my job. Feeling so happy, though, as my boss gaves me some gift when just I went back home. Thank you guys so much for 4 years.
1. März 2017 02:25
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JUST A DIARY ON FEB.28TH

I want someone to correct my diary. Could you do that for me, please?

JUST A DIARY ON FEB.28TH

At last, (yesterday night,) I quit my part-time jobs which I have been worked for about 4 years yesterday at night. I'm really sad so bad because I was excited to do my job. (I was also) Feeling so happy, though, as my boss gaves me some gift when just I went back home. Thank you guys so much for 4 years.


Notes: "yesterday at night" ----> "quit part time job"  these two should be next to each other! 

1. März 2017
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JUST A DIARY ON FEB.28TH

I want someone to correct my diary. Could you do that for me, please?

JUST A DIARY ON FEB.28TH

At last, yesterday, at night, I quit my part-time jobs which I have been worked at for about 4 years yesterday at night. I'm really sad so bad because I was excited to do really liked my job. Feeling so happy, though, as my boss gave me some gifts just when I went back home. Thank you guys so much for 4 years.


One uses "excited" about a single experience usually or a new experience.  "I was excited to go to my new job".  Generally you don't get "excited" every day.  I think its like わくわくする.  You could say "I was motivated to do my job" but "I really liked my job" is probably what you want.


"gaves" isn't a word. "gives" is present perfect or something, I don't know, I'm not an english teacher.  "He gave me a gift before I left."  "He gives me a gift before I leave".

1. März 2017

JUST A DIARY ON FEB.28TH

I want someone to correct my diary. Could you do that for me, please?

JUST A DIARY ON FEB.28TH

At last, I quit my part-time jobs which I have been worked for about 4 years yesterday at night. I'm really sad so bad because I was excited to do my job. Feeling so happy, though, as my boss gaves me some gift when just I went back home. Thank you guys so much for 4 years.


Last night, I finally quit my part-time job after working there for approximately 4 years. It makes me feel sad because I  really enjoyed my work.  Just as I was leaving for home, my boss gave me a gift, which made me really happy.  It's been a wonderful 4 years. Thank you, guys. 

16. Juli 2017
At last, yesterday night, I quit my part-time job which I have worked for about 4 years. I'm really sad because I really liked my job. Feeling so happy, though, as my boss gaves me some gifts just when I went back home. Thank you guys so much for 4 years.
8. März 2017
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