30 days of writing in English: Day 18
Brief story of a girl
This is the story of a girl who likes to do the simple and fun things all children do: walking, jumping, singing, talking at all hours, playing, skating, dancing, cycling, eating chocolates and sweets, rolling In the grass, walking barefoot, laughing without motives, hugging trees, cutting flowers, inventing and reciting poems, playing with her favorite toys ... With regard to toys, for her any object becomes a wonderful toy: heels, dresses and Mother's make-up is her favorite.
This girl is always happy and likes to talk about any subject. For her, there is nothing more interesting than asking her innocent questions, typical of a curious girl. Sometimes the adults around her say "do not ask silly questions", but for her they are not. Every question from her has an answer. Our girl knows that when the adults do not respond, it is because they don't know the answer.
The girl in our story repeats everything her parents, brothers, teachers, uncles, friends and especially television say. She doesn't can not yet distinguish whether what is appropriate or not, good or bad ... But soon, at least she thinks about it, she will begin to elaborate his own phrases and concepts: she will learn to have his own criteria and will no longer need to ask adults so much.
This girl is an expert in emotions: she moves quickly from laughter to tears, from joy to sadness or anger. Of course, unlike adults, these children's emotions are very fleeting and almost always happy and ready to dream with many adventures, to laugh more and more hard and especially to play. The good thing about being a kid is that you can always draw plans without fear of failure. For children, there is always an opportunity to dream again.
As I wrote this little text, I remembered my childhood and all that she represented to me. Luckily we were all children sometime and we all carried inside the boy or girl that we went.
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30 days of writing in English: Day 18
Brief story of a girlThis is the story of a girl who likes to do the simple and fun things all children do: walking, jumping, singing, talking at all hours, playing, skating, dancing, cycling, eating chocolates and sweets, rolling In the grass, walking barefoot, laughing without motives, hugging trees, cutting flowers, inventing and reciting poems, playing with her favorite toys ... With regard to toys, for her any object becomes a wonderful toy: heels, dresses and Mother's make-up is her favorite.
This girl is always happy and likes to talk about any subject. For her, there is nothing more interesting than asking her innocent questions, typical of a curious girl. Sometimes the adults around her say "do not ask silly questions", but for her they are not. Every question from her has an answer. Our girl knows that when the adults do not respond, it is because they don't know the answer.
The girl in our story repeats everything her parents, brothers, teachers, uncles, friends and especially television say. She doesn't can not yet distinguish whether what is appropriate or not, good or bad ... But soon, at least she thinks about it, she will begin to elaborate his her own phrases and concepts: she will learn to have his her own criteria and will no longer need to ask adults so much.
This girl is an expert in emotions: she moves quickly from laughter to tears, from joy to sadness or anger. Of course, unlike adults, these children's emotions are very fleeting and almost always happy and ready to dream with many adventures, to laugh more and more hard and especially to play. The good thing about being a kid is that you can always draw plans without fear of failure. For children, there is always an opportunity to dream again.
As I wrote this little text, I remembered my childhood and all that she represented to me. Luckily we were all children sometime and we all carried inside the boy or girl that we went.
Thank you for your correction!
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30 days of writing in English: Day 18
Brief story of a girlThis is the story of a girl who likes to do the simple and fun things all children do: walking, jumping, singing, talking at all hours, playing, skating, dancing, cycling, eating chocolates and sweets, rolling In the grass, walking barefoot, laughing without motives, hugging trees, cutting flowers, inventing and reciting poems, playing with her favorite toys. ... With regard to toys, for her, any object becomes a wonderful toy: heels, dresses and Mother's make-up is are her favorites.
This girl is always happy and likes to talk about any subject. For her, there is nothing more interesting than asking her innocent questions, typical of a curious girl. Sometimes the adults around her say, "Do not ask silly questions", ; but for her they are not. Because, in her mind, every question from her has an answer. Our girl knows that when the adults do not respond, it is because they don't do not know the answer.
The girl in our story repeats everything her parents, brothers, teachers, uncles, friends and especially television say. She doesn't can not yet distinguish whether what is appropriate or not, good or bad ... But soon, at least she thinks will think about it, . She will begin to elaborate his her own phrases and concepts: she will learn to have his her own criteria and will no longer need to ask adults so much.
This girl is an expert in emotions: she moves quickly from laughter to tears, from joy to sadness or anger. Of course, unlike adults, these children's this child's emotions are very fleeting and she is(?) almost always happy and ready to dream with of many adventures, . To laugh more and more hard and especially to play. The good(best?) thing about being a kid is that you can always draw(or "make") plans without fear of failure. For children, there is always an opportunity to dream again.
As I wrote this little text, I remembered my childhood and all that she it represented to me. Luckily, at sometime, we were all children sometime and we all carried carry inside the boy or girl that we went want.
Great essay! This is my first correction, so I hope it is easy to understand. Let me know if you have any questions. I like your writing style and the concept of this essay.
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30 days of writing in English: Day 18
Brief story of a girlThis is the story of a girl who likes to do the simple and fun things all children do: walking, jumping, singing, talking at all hours, playing, skating, dancing, cycling, eating chocolates and sweets, rolling In the grass, walking barefoot, laughing without reason, hugging trees, cutting flowers, inventing and reciting poems, playing with her favorite toys ... With regard to toys, for her any object becomes a wonderful toy: heels, dresses and Mother's make-up is her favorite.
This girl is always happy and likes to talk about any subject. For her, there is nothing more interesting than asking her innocent questions, typical of a curious girl. Sometimes the adults around her say "do not ask silly questions", but for her they are not. Every question from her has an answer. Our girl knows that when the adults do not respond, it is because they don't know the answer.
The girl in our story repeats everything her parents, brothers, teachers, uncles, friends and especially television say. She cannot yet distinguish between what is appropriate or not, good or bad ... But soon, at least she thinks, she will begin to elaborate her own phrases and concepts: she will learn to have her own criteria and will no longer need to ask adults so much.
This girl is an expert in emotions: she moves quickly from laughter to tears, from joy to sadness or anger. Of course, unlike adults, these children's emotions are very fleeting and almost always happy and ready to dream with many adventures, to laugh more and more hard and especially to play. The good thing about being a kid is that you can always draw plans without fear of failure. For children, there is always an opportunity to dream again.
As I wrote this little text, I remembered my childhood and all that she represented to me. Luckily we were all children sometime and we all carried inside the boy or girl that we went.
Thank you for your correction!
Overall this was excellent! I loved the descriptive language you used, and there were only a few errors. Keep up the amazing work!
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