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The first time I fell in love The first time I fell in love was when I was 10. I used to work hard in elementary school. But I loved a boy called Diogo. Diogo was the same age of me. He was tall, with short, fair hair and green eyes. He was a beautiful smiled. I really liked him. One problem was all the girls liked him. One day, I wrote a letter for him. I handed the letter and he ripped in front of me. He didn´t read and I cried very much. But I was persistent. Another day, me and one friend was in front of him house. I sang a song and my friend played guitar. What´s a fiasco! He ignored me. I was chasing him all over town. But he doesn´t like me and he looked me ugly. I have good memories. Today, I find it funny! I probably won´t get married and have children. I think it´s very difficulty to find someone who looks like me. I don´t know explain in English. But I believe in love, and I believe that today´s relantioships are also more difficult. People are losing respect for others. It´s sad!!!

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The first time I fell in love

The first time I fell in love was when I was 10. I used to work hard in elementary school. But I loved a boy called Diogo. Diogo was the same age as me. He was tall, with short, fair hair and green eyes. He had a beautiful smile. I really liked him. One problem was that all the girls liked him. One day, I wrote a letter to him. I handed him the letter and he ripped it up in front of me. He didn´t read it and I cried very much. But I was persistent. Another day, my friend and I were in front of his house and I serenaded him and my friend played guitar. What´s a fiasco! He ignored me. I was chasing him all over town. But he didn't like me and thought me ugly. I have good memories. Today, I find it funny! I probably won´t get married and have children. I think it´s very difficult to find someone who looks like me. I don´t know how to explain it in English. But I believe in love, and I believe that today´s relantionships are also more difficult. People are losing respect for another. It´s sad!!!

very well written!

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The first time I fell in love

The first time I fell in love was when I was 10. I used to work hard in elementary school but I loved a boy named Diogo. Diogo was the same age as me. He was tall with short fair hair and green eyes. He had a beautiful smile and I really liked him. The only problem was all the other girls liked him too. One day, I wrote a letter to him. When I handed him the letter, he ripped it up in front of me. He didn't even read it!! I couldn't stop crying. In spite of this, I was persistent. One day, a friend and I went to his house. I sag a song and my friend played guitar. What´s a fiasco! He ignored me. I was chasing him all over town, but in the end, I realized he didn't like me and thought I was ugly.

Today, I have good memories about the whole situation and I find it funny! I probably won´t get married and have children. I think it´s very difficulty to find someone who looks like me. I don´t know how to explain it in  English, but I believe in love and I believe that today´s relationships are more difficult to nurture than relationships in the the past. People are losing respect for each other. It´s sad!!!

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Thanks a lot Raymond!!!!
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Sad story. I have a similar one hahaha. Your writing is very good ... only a few corrections.
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Yeah....can be jesus Romero

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