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This Is Me
My name is Hayden,a boy comes1 from China.... I am interested in games, computers, physics, music and so on. If you have the same hobbies as me,you can please add me to your list. I think we can be good friends. My dream school is M.I.T.,Do you know this school?,yes it is M.I.T.... but know,However I 2 have to learn English, I am getting interested in English and I need a person who can teach me the language 3 English.hehe...just Please help me!!
btw, By the way, if you like Chinese,you also can add me for I can chat with you in Chinese.
1. From the English name you had given yourself, we know that you are a boy. So this is superfluous.
2. You must capitalize all your "i"s regardless if it is after the full stop or not. No exception!
3. You using the word "English" too many times. This is another way of saying the same thing. Using any word too many times is boring in writing.
We may have the same interests but different in areas. Anyway add me if you want :)
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