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For families, it is apparent that having fast foods for over a long period is detrimental (better to say detrimental in what way ? Example : detrimental to ones health/ detrimental to family's well being etc). A wide range of examples manifest that high calories in fast foods are highly related There is wide ranging research that say that high calories in fast foods are a major factor contributing to chronic diseases such as high blood pressure, obesity (, diabetes ?) and so forth. Furthermore, the deficiency of nutrition in fast foods also post poses a threat to families. Therefore, the negative influence imposed impact of fast foods on individuals and families should not be ignored.
In addition, it turns out that fast foods is are also a hindrance to the publicity promotion (publicity is okay but promotion is better) of traditional foods' cultures. Which means people may put less focus (can also say less importance, less value) on traditional cultures. Once people get accustomed to having fast foods, families and societies may be more inclined to turn a blind eye to traditional foods' cultures so that they are unable to be inherited by us these important values (or cultures) may not be passed down to future generations. (very nice use of the phrase "turn a blind eye" :-) )
To sum up, although fast foods have some benefits to some extent , they are still hazardous to citizens' one's health . Given that this is of great significance for to societies and families, it is vital that they be aware of the negative effects of fast foods and properly change their dietary habits structure .
Quite a difficult topic but you wrote very well.
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In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?Recent years have witnessed a major trend in dietary habits that where traditional foods are being substituted by international fast foods in many areas (major cities). Although fast foods indeed have some benefits, I personally believe that they bring more adverse impacts to citizens' one's life . (you are not wrong, but it does not sound very natural to use citizen here.)
Indeed, it is widely accepted that the appearance of fast foods has lead to great convenience to us, which means it is conducive to saving time especially in our current fast-paced society. Furthermore, they also have an unresisting attraction for irresistible appeal to children. Nevertheless, compared with traditional foods, fast foods exert much more adverse impacts on families and societies.
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