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Imagine what will the students obtain and who they are going to be if learning academic knowledge only. Will they be wiser, more successful and the person who can really live up to our expectations? It's hard to guarantee. As far as I'm concerned, "learning academic knowledge" is important but not the most important task for students. Wealthy knowledge though the students can acquire, they'll find it arduous to get along with others even themselves when it comes to more complicated circumstance in their life roads. Furthermore, it's totally a waste of time if the students have no idea why they study, who they truly are and what they are going to be, but just studying the whole day and pleasing teachers as well as parents. Of course, most of people insisted that "learning academic knowledge" can change our life paths and regard it as the holiest things. However, they haven't realized that the person who changed his/her life through knowledge was on the basis of knowing whom he/she is and what he/she wants. Without the deep understanding of ourselves, the life and the world, how can we accomplish our own values by the knowledge we learned? Thus, it's more fundamental to make students know who they are, what they are going to be, how to communicate with people around and then teach them how to acquire knowledge themselves. Moreover, learning from mistakes and the life is as necessary as learning academic knowledge. To be an intelligent person in the face of choices and a perseverant person when facing the adversity are the important tasks students need to foster as well. In a nutshell, there's nothing wrong with "learning" itself, but "why learning and learning what" should be attached the great importance. So long is the writing that your corrections will be highly appreciated!!🥴
14. Apr. 2024 11:08
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Imagine what students will obtain and who they are going to be if they only learn academic knowledge. Will they be wiser, more successful and people who can really live up to our expectations? It's hard to guarantee. As far as I'm concerned, "learning academic knowledge" is important but not the most important task for students. Although the students can acquire a wealth of knowledge, they might find it difficult to get along with others, or even themselves, when it comes to more complicated circumstance in their lives. Furthermore, it's a total waste of time if students have no idea of why they are studying, who they truly are and what they are going to be, but instead just study the whole day to please teachers as well as parents. Of course, many people insist that "learning academic knowledge" can change our life paths and regard it as the pinnacle of achievement. However, they haven't realized that a person who changed his/her life through knowledge did it on the basis of knowing whom he/she was and what he/she wanted. Without the deep understanding of ourselves, the life and the world, how can we accomplish our own dreams through the knowledge we learned? Thus, it's fundamental to encourage students to know who they are, what they are going to be, how to communicate with people around them and then teach them how to acquire knowledge themselves. Moreover, learning from mistakes and life is as necessary as learning academic knowledge. To be an intelligent person in the face of choices and someone who perseveres when facing adversity are important attributes students need to foster as well. In a nutshell, there's nothing wrong with "learning" itself, but why should great importance be attached to “learning and learning what" (not sure what you mean by “learning and learning what”) My writing is so long that your corrections will be highly appreciated!!🥴
Most of this is ok but it’s a bit vague. It could do with some real examples.
16. April 2024
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