Could you proofread the following note ( topic is an eudcational field trip) ? Describe an educational trip that you went on when you were in school Where did you go, what school subject did the trip study, who did you meet there, why are the lessons you leaned there so important. During elementary school, I was fortunate enough to go to the zoo on an educational field trip: each group of four students chose an animal to study during the field trip. My group picked the dolphins because our science class had learned a little bit about them in science class today. At that time, I have witnessed children with Down’s syndrome touched and fed or pat the dolphins as a therapy. I asked a trainer why it is helpful for Down’s syndrome. He told me that Dolphine therapy is not a cure but it can help alleviate some symptoms associated with children conditions. I learned to be specific, it leads to better eye contact, smiling, immune system, and improved fine motor skills. This trip also thought me the dolphins are a very intelligent creature and the importance of protecting elephants, as they are facing extinction due to poachers. It was positively the most educational trip I attended while in school.

How can I live in TX more fun. ( Could you possibly proofread my note? ) My favorite hobbies were watching an independent movie in Cinecube, an independent cinema and going to an art gallery during the weekdays. One of the good things was working as a nurse that I can get day off during the week. It could be the worst thing as nurses can not have enough time with their family and friends on weekends. Anyhow, It was the best way to spend my day off weekdays independently instead of complaining about not often having holidays on weekends. Even though the smaller cinemas which usually show low-cost, artistic and independent films are facing financial difficulties are going out of business in South Korea like USA, It is easier for Seoul citiziens to access various independent movies and culture events than New Yorkers. in terms of affordable prices. After moving in TX, that kind of hobbies are quite luxurious thing unless I live in NY. How to live fun and enjoyable in USA is a topic that has captured ed me. Here are my lists what characteristics is needed to live fun in TX. ( I only know in College station, TX, I can not say I know USA ) The person is a big fan of sport. The person is a devout Christian. The person is a workaholic. The person is an academic and a bookworm. The person likes crafting or DIY. The person is superrich so.. he can travel everywhere. Reading books or joining a painting club would be the most stable method for me. For starters, reading a book would be a realistic option for me. As soon as taking part in a book club, I have realized that reading English novels is more difficult than news, medical books because of a wide range of adjectives and adverbs that I do not know exact those meanings. However, I want to keep stick to reading different kinds of English books. At one of friends’ request to recommend a book written by a Korean author, I visited in Bans&nobles at my town today. It is good to see that Korean author’s novels not an outdated book citied Korean war are placed a shelf. I expected that I would be easy to sympathize with the book as the book portrayed a dedicated Korean mother. However, I was hardly able to be moved by the book. Even though I grasped the content, I could not taste and feel English contents and be immersed in emotion unlike Korean books. Even if I found an independent movie in my town, It would be the same situation. My English ability just remains communication of content not deeply and elaborately expressing my feelings and ideas. I sometimes think to be a perfect bil

Could you proofread the following note which describes traditional dress ? Describe clothing that you wear on special occasions You should say.. when will you wear it What do the clothes look like where did you buy it why you wear it on special occasions Koreans usually wear Hanbok, traditional Korean dress on specially occasions such as wedding ceremony and holidays. It is handmade and measuring by a trailer with embroidered silk fabric. The dress is typically consisted with a short jacket and a long skirt. My mother in law gave me it as a wedding gift. She bought it in her neighborhood. she is acquainted the trailer over 20 years. To let people know Korean culture on special occasions, when I and my husband are invited a American friend’s house, we will wear it. Newlyweds especially wear the traditional dress when they visit relatives or par tents’ house to show respect to elders and receive congratulation. In addition, 1st baby’s birthday and 60 years birthday, people wear Hanbok as they are meaningful birthday according to Korean tradition. http://www.pinterest.com/explore/korean-hanbok/

Writing IELTS' task 1; analyzing chart Hi Guys, I am not good at analyzing chart. Could you possibly proofread or point out my mistakes the following note? Thank you for reading. The charts show how the dependence on 3 industries, tourism, service, and agriculture has been changed among 4 nations, namely Germany, USA, Japan, and China from 1980 to 2010. We can see from the charts that in 2010, level of dependence on tourism industry has been shown a significantly increase in Germany, USA, and Japan follow behind with approximately 5 times, 6 times, and 1.4 times higher than in 1980 with exception of China. On the other hand, there is likely to be a period of stability in the rate of reliance on agriculture industry. In China, the dependence of agriculture even decreased from nearly 80 % in 1980 to almost 50 % in 2010. In level of dependence on service industry, there was no distinguish change in 4 countries. Among them, Japan still held the lead follow by the service section, 60 %. Thus, the graph tell us that in 2010, many countries were more likely to expend tourism industry rather than others to 1980 so we can infer that while primary industry has been declining, the portion of tertiary industry has been showing a remarkable increase for 30 years. Especially, this trend was more predominant feature among developed countries rather than a developing country, China. Because of the decrease of dependence on agriculture in China, many Chinese might migrate in urban areas.

Baseball game in Korea Describe a sports event in your country.. You should say.. What is the game.. Where and when is it played.. Who are the players … Why do you think it is so significant.. The sport everybody loves to watch or play in Korea is baseball. Especially, among middle or high school students, it became popular so that South Korea captured the 2014 Little League World Series Title. Now, Hyunjin Ryu, a South Korean starting pitcher for the LA Dodgers has gained in popularity as he is the first South Korean to serve as the starting pitcher of a MLB. While the game is basically the same so that played in the U.S. such as the baseball season typically begins around and March and run to late September each year. Most of baseball stadiums are located in the midst of major cities. However, there are some interesting differences. Firstly, going to a base ball game in Korea is more affordable than in many other places from $7 to $40 depending on seat. There are VIP seats which you can do barbecue yourself on table seats while watching the game with your friends. Secondly, You can bring your own food and beverages what you want in side of the stadium. There are many food vendors inside of the stadium like the U.S. but the price of food is as the same as buying it out side of the stadium. Type of food is vary from dried squid to chicken and noodle. Lastly, Korean baseball has cheerleaders who encourage the fans to support their team. They have a cheer for every player and keep going through the whole game. Korean baseball crowds are enthusiastically singing and following cheerleaders’ chanting. Thus, going to the baseball game is an easy way to release Koreans’ stress and gather their families and friends.

Sheba cat food commercial Could you possibly proofread on the following note? 5) Describe an advertisement You should say.. what was the product.. why did you want to buy it.. Where did you buy it.. when did you buy it. I bought Sheba cat food due to Eva Longoria's charm. She is one of main actresses in Desperate Housewives appealed in the cat food TV commercial. As a big fan of Desperate housewives, I am already aware that she is well-known as a cat lover. In the commercial, she is showing her extraordinary dance moves, as well as her curvy and sexy figure while undressing to the rhythm of the music. Then, She quickly turns up the radio volume and begins to dance non-stop while her pet follows her around the house, until she gives it food. It really caught my attention and it seemed like fancy cat food. Thus, I bought Sheba’s cat food in a pet store last month. During that time, I firstly took care of a cat because owner of the cat, my husband's colleague went to Korea for his vacation. With lack of information what food the cat prefers, I couldn’t remember other name of the cat food with exception of Sheba. That’s why I bought it for the cat as a treat but It turned out the can only eat dry cat food. Thus, I gave a street cat it.

If you could live in any other time period, which would you choose? Could you please proofread my note? I think my answer is pissing the point of the question. If you could live in any other time period, which would you choose? I would like to go back to the past when I worked as a new nurse in ICU; intensive care unit. I have regretted that I went out of ICU after just a month later and transferred a psychiatric unit. At that time, I thought I do not have an aptitude for dealing with emergency situations and take caring serious ill patients. Even if working in a mental hospital was rewarding, my lack of practical experience in ICU has been consistently acting as a block to progress in my nursing carrier. If I had a chance to go back to the past, I would have worked even harder with an expectation of better tomorrow at least for a year.

There is a push to move medical records to electronic databases. Do you support this move? Could you possibly proofread my note? There is a push to move medical records to electronic databases. Do you support this move? Why or why not? As more doctors and hospitals go digital with medical records. Some people might say that keeping medical records secure is a challenging for them due to growing hacking problems. However, I think using electronic databases is by far the better way to safely keep medical records. This is because paper records are vulnerable to water and fire. Staking up many paper records takes up too much room. Even it is not easy to find old one’s record shortly and sometimes, it is hard to read the hurried writing. Especially, in hospital setting, time is always important issue for saving one’s life. If a patient having medical history is rushed to the emergency room, medical staffs should find his past history and make a quick decision. Because of this reason, It would be a more efficient way to just type patient’ id and wait in a minutes to see the one’s history on the computer rather than ransacking the one’s paper records.

Why I like the Bing Bang Theory. (Could you possibly proofread my short note? ) 2) Describe a television program You should Say What is it called, who are the main characters, what makes the show popular, why is it your personal favorite I absolutely love The Bing Bang Theory. It is a television comedy started in the U.S. a few years ago that has gained a lot of popularity. The show is primarily centered on five characters living in CA. Except of Penny, a waitress, rest of 4 main characters are eccentric, and self-professed nerds. Sheldon, a main character is constantly insulting the people that he loves. However, people do not hate him as he is just clumsy in social setting and an innocent. I think major reasons why The Bing Bang Theory has kept high rating is its power of scenario and actors’ great acting skills. Some of American TV shows has too much coming on sexual or violence scenes to apple to audience. However, without those tricks and culture barrier, I am always intrigued by its story and it makes me laugh.