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Writing Exercise 354 - LETTER WRITING (PART 31) Dear Mr. Williams, Thank you for your letter. Due to the pandemic, our businesses have been impacted badly, so we had to cut down on orders. We will make a sales strategy for next year. We would like to discuss with you and see if there is something you could supply for us. We are interested in the new discount you offer. Could you please send us the details? I look forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, James Mazur
8 de nov. de 2021 9:27
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Writing Exercise 354 - LETTER WRITING (PART 31) Dear Mr. Williams, Thank you for your letter. Due to the pandemic, our businesses have been heavily impacted , so we have cut down on orders. We are planning a sales strategy for next year. We would like to discuss with you and see if there is anything you could supply for us. We are interested in the new discounted offer. Could you please send us the details? I look forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, James Mazur
The original is fine but I changed a few phrases to make it sound slightly more professional. Good work!
8 de noviembre de 2021
Writing Exercise 354 - LETTER WRITING (PART 31) Dear Mr. Williams, Thank you for your letter. Due to the pandemic, our businesses have been impacted badly, so we have had to cut down on orders. We will plan our sales strategy for next year. We would like to discuss it with you and see if there is anything you could supply for us. We are interested in the new discount you are offering. Could you please send us the details? I look forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, James Mazur
I count 79 words in your answer (clearly Writing Exercise 354 etc isn't part of the answer) Actually this question makes no sense and the English isn't good. It asks you to explain why you are not placing orders, then why you are!
8 de noviembre de 2021
Dear Mr. Williams, Thank you for your letter. Due to the pandemic, our business has been impacted badly, so we have had to cut down on orders. We will make a sales strategy for next year and we would like to discuss it with you to see if there is something you could supply us with. We are very interested in the special new discount you mentioned. Could you please send us the details? I look forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, James Mazur
This is too many words for the exercise instructions. You are instructed to write 60-80 words. This is 84. You also have not followed the instruction: 'telling him your plan for next year' - there is no mention of the plan in your writing. Here is an example of what you could have written (77 words): Dear Mr. Williams, Thanks for your letter. Due to the ongoing pandemic, we have been forced to decline some orders for next year. Our plan is to reduce storage overheads so we can order smaller quantities. We would be very interested in hearing more about the special discount you mentioned. Ideally, we would need up to 15% off orders of no more than 50 units. It would be great to discuss this soon. Kind Regards, James Mazur Focus on making shorter statements and addressing the main points only.
8 de noviembre de 2021
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