Anna
Many people want to live in big cities, because theu are modern and convenient. In my opinion, living in big cities is not so good...
Убрала пару ненужных артиклей, плюс сочетаемость некоторых слов изменила и вместо for my share гораздо лучше in my opinion
Насчет связи, можно написать следующее: Life in a big city has a lot of advantages.
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First, there are a lot of shops and there is wide choice of things to buy in a big city. That is why, you can easily find what you need.
Secondly, there is a great variety of means of transport and you can get wherever you want. So, cities have a lot of conveniences.
However, cities are very noisy and they're always crowded with cars and people in the streets.
On the whole, living in a big city isn't easy. Think properly before moving there
так гораздо лучше
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