Obsessions
All of us need something to love, something that would occupy our mind and distract us from our everyday routine. I know people who adore their work and devote themselves to be firing on all cylinders around the clock. It's difficult to me to imagine a work bringing happiness to somebody. Albeit sometimes this is the case. Someone are obsessed with children. Someone can't live without binging on junk food and they state that this can make them happy despite of everything. We all have our own needs. I, for one, love a sense of comfort and relaxation. Sometimes I do need some particular things to diversify my life, something extraordinary and unusual, but in general I settle for ordinary everyday trivia. I can easily enjoy myself at home with Internet or some friends. I think I don't have any obsessions and hopefully, won't have. It's great to have your escape, but people tend to be addicted. Thus the escape may become a drug which takes control over you. I think we should just have not only one thing which we love the most. If we have a few occupations or people or other things without which we wouldn't be happy, we'll suffer less if by accident we lose some of them.
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Obsessions
All of us need something to love, something that would occupy our minds and distract us from our everyday daily routine. I know people who adore their work and devote themselves to be firing on all cylinders around the clock. It's difficult to for me to imagine a the idea of work bringing happiness to somebody. Albeit sometimes this is the case. Someone Some people are obsessed with children. Someone Some can't live without binging on junk food and they state that this can make them happy despite of in spite of everything. We all have our own needs. I, for one, love a sense of comfort and relaxation. Sometimes I do need some particular things to diversify my life, something extraordinary and unusual, but in general I settle for ordinary everyday trivia. I can easily enjoy myself at home with and surf the Internet or hang out with some friends. I think I don't I don't think I have any obsessions and hopefully, won't have. It's great to have your escape, but people tend to become addicted to something. Thus, the escape may become a drug which takes control over you. I think we should just have not only more than one thing which we love the most. If we have a few occupations, people or other things without which we wouldn't be happy that make us happy, then we'll suffer less if we happened to lose some of them by accident.
Good work! Here are my corrections.
- 'everyday routine' isn't necessarily wrong or anything, I seem to find 'daily routine' slightly more in usage.
- it's more widely used to say "It's difficult for me". If you want to use it the way you did you would need to be put two commas, e.g. "It's difficult, to me, ______"... I rarely see this construction, but it can be used.
- I simply added 'surf the' and 'hang out' to make it a slightly more complex.
- I changed it to "I don't think" to take out the second I. What you wrote isn't wrong, I just wanted to simplify it.
- 'become addicted to something' - I just wanted to make it sound more full.
- With the last two sentences I understood your meaning but perhaps maybe in English it came out more complex than what I thought so I rearranged it to make it more simple. Maybe it's just the word placement that comes across as a bit off, but I understand the text and the meaning.
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