First notebook entry: Introducing myself

My name is Toan and I was born and grew up living in Vietnam. <- or you could say "born and raised in Vietnam" it's a fairly common phrase
in Vietnam (or the third person personal pronoun "it") is a beautiful and peaceful country, there are many historical, cultural traditions? Events?

Since "historical" and "cultural" are adjectives, they describe a noun. Examples in purple. Or if you are wanting to have "Vietnam" be the noun that "historical" and "cultural" describe, then it could be this, "It is a beautiful and peaceful country, with a lot of history and culture" Or something similar. You get this sentence by replacing the adjectives "historical" and "cultural" with the nouns "history" and "culture"

You could even take out "country" and have a sentence like this, "It (or 'Vietnam') is beautiful, peaceful, and has a lot of history and culture"

I am making financial position control <- I'm not sure what you are trying to say here; are you talking about your job? Your sentence structure here is:

pronoun/verb/verb/adjective/noun/noun  so you have

"financial position control" - a noun phrase;

"am making financial position control" - a verb phrase;

and "I" a noun phrase;

so all together your sentence is an inflectional phrase, but it still does not make sense. I think this is because the verb "making" here is a bit odd - think about "I am making control", it would more likely be "I am gaining control" or "I have control". Also I do not know what the noun phrase "financial position control" is.

So basically:

-Choose a different verb (not "making")

-find a better translation for "financial position control"

Does "financial position control" mean that you are becoming more economically stable? If so, you could say "I am becoming more economically stable" or "I am gaining control of my financial situation" or "I am gaining control of my financial position"

Looking forward to exchanging in (<- in this case you need a preposition here) the better more challenging English

or       more advanced

or       higher-level

"better English" is a bit awkward

Perhaps "Looking forward to speaking in more advanced English"

Good luck with your English studies!

Unimportant fact: I have a friend who is from Vietnam and is also learning English right now.