Dentist

Yesterday I went to the dentist office because I use braces. There were a lot of people in the queue and i waited a long time to be attending. I think I waited for 1 hour. There were a fewer people standing, I have am lucky to be sitting. After that, I went to the mall to bought buy a book called "capitães de areia" but I didn't find the book. We just have one book store at the mall, and I think it this is a bad thing, because the people should read more.

Dentist

Yesterday i went to the dentist office because i use braces. There were a lot of people in the queue and i waited a long time to be attending. I think i waited for 1 hour. There were fewer people standing, i have luck to be sitting. After that, i went to the mall to bought a book called "capitães de areia" but i didn't find the book. Just have one book store at the mall, and i think it is a bad thing, because the people should read more.

Yesterday I went to the dentist's office because I wear braces. There were a lot of people in the line and I waited a long time before being waited on. I think I waited for 1 hour. There were fewer people standing; I was lucky to be sitting. After that, I went to the mall to buy a book called "Capitães de areia" but I didn't find the book. They just have one book store at the mall and I think it is a bad thing because people should read more.

Very nice work!  Pink = should be corrected; Blue = my suggestions.

• In the USA people say they wear braces (on their teeth). Usually if someone says they use braces, they are talking about braces on their legs for support.

• In the USA we use the word line instead of queue, which is British English. Many people in the USA would not know what a queue was.  ;-)

• "Because people" is much more common than "because the people," which one would more often hear in a political speech than in every day conversation.

Good job!