Whether we should keep animals in zoos or not.

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Some people think zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, some people think zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.


In fact, this question is significant for me as an individual (personal affection). For this reason, I believe animals should be kept in zoos as they provide safety as well as preservation for animals in need.

Some people say that it is a sick form of entertainment. Meanwhile, a large number of people consider that why lots of animals are called wild animals, due to the fact that animals favorite living environment is in the wild. Actually, I can understand their points when I think about it. Thousands of animals might have, or probably would have, died because of natural causes or more likely human’s predation.

In my opinion, these animals have been born in zoos. Not only do they know subsistence, but also they don’t miss "the wild" as they do not know what it is, especially when zoos and wildlife preserves come into the equation. I shall not hesitate to choose the first. There are many endangered species out there, and as much as some people hate locking these creatures in cages, it is a practice that will ultimately save those animals. On the other hand, conservation departments need more effort. For example, they need to find new sources of money. Zoos also allow children to see and learn about animals that they may not otherwise get to see. So for the most part, I consider it is a positive practice.

I do agree that we should keep animals in zoos, or at least wildlife preserves. Particularly, nowadays, animals in zoos can actually live a normal life, since zoos are being improved. When the time comes, there won't be a difference between wildlife and zoos. - Very good!

Talk about whether (that) we should keep animals in zoos or not.

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Some people think zoos are cruel and that all (the) zoos should be closed. However, others (some people) think zoos are useful to protect (the) rare animals. Discuss both (these) views and give your opinion. 
 
In fact, it has great (is) significance for me as an individual (personal affection). For this reason, I believe (wish) animals should be kept in zoos as they provide a safe environment (safety) as well as a preservation for endangered species. (animals in need.)

Many (Seriously) people hold the view that it (who say that) is a sick form of entertainment to keep animals encaged. They (Meanwhile, a large of number people) consider(s) that is why the animals (lots of animals) are (who) called wild animals, due to the fact their natural living environment is in the wild. (that animals favorite living environment in wild.) Actually, I could understand their point(s) of view but just think about it. Thousands of animals might have, or probably would have, died due to (because of) natural causes or, more likely, human predators. (human’s predation.)

In my opinion, (these) animals that have been born in a zoo, (.) are not only protected (do they know how subsistence) but also (they) don’t miss "the wild" since (as) they do not know what it is. This is especially true when zoos and wildlife preserves come into the equation. I shall not hesitate to choose the first. There are many endangered species out there, and, despite (as much as) plenty of people hating to see (hate locking) these creatures locked in cages, it is a practice that will ultimately save those animals. At the same time/Simultaneously (On the other hand), aid agencies (relative departments) need more assistance. (effort.) For example, they need to find sources of funding. (finding sources of money.) Another positive is that (So,) it also allows children to see and learn about animals that they may not otherwise get to see. So, for the most part, I consider it is for the better good. (an optional action.)

I do agree that we should keep animals in zoos, or at least within wildlife preserves. Particularly, nowadays, animals in zoos can actually live a normal life, since conditions are much (zoos are being) improved. Given (When) time (comes), there won't be a difference between wildlife and zoos.

Well-thought-out article and good to read.