Gratitude (1)

Hello my fellow pals. I'm happy today! I think we should always consider the bright side of the life. There is green grass out there as well as dirty. The world is what we make of it. Be the change you want to see in the world (as Gandhi said). The world is full of joy, full of pain. You may contribute a verse to this prodigious show (as Robin Williams said). You should make it positively?while you still can. We are in this world for a limited period of time. A few decades, years, weeks? We don't know how many. Our life could certainly end this century or even this month.

So, I urge you to always act positively around you. Be the kind drop of water in the ocean. Be compassionate. Be aware of the weaker ones around you. Not only in the cold winter when it's freezing outside, but at any moment. Be present, feel alive, and most importantly: be grateful!

Gratitude is important! I have read about this in the Magic Book of Rhonda Byrne. We should be happy and grateful about what we have, while we have it, because it could be taken away from us. Gratitude is a wonderful feeling because it brings joy to us. We feel alive, happy to have what we have.

Thank you, thank you, thank you! Thank you for the love I can give to and receive from my father, my wife and my friends. Thanks for my health. Thanks for the sun that shines (though rarely in the cold winter, it shines). Thanks for the morning. Thanks for the coffee. Thanks for the water I can drink.

I had a water outage (failure?) yesterday in my street, so I know what it means to not have water to drink. I feel aware of it and I tell myself that a lot of people are facing this each day, especially Palestinians, with whom I have a lot of thoughts and positive waves?. I understand also that facing an electrical outage could cause a lot more trouble. In our Western way of life, to face a lack of electricity means not to be able to prepare dinner, to warm our house's rooms…

So, thank you, thank you, thank you!
I am grateful for having such a beautiful life, with friends, family, love and health.
I still haven't found work for several months but I feel useful and happy with my volunteer actions. I am in awe at the nature, the birds, the sun shining and people who care for me.

What an excellent essay! Your level is very good.

I have corrected some minor errors (with prepositions and tense amendments from past simple to the more appropriate present perfect for actions done that are affecting your present state) and some stylistic rules: for example, we are not really supposed to use 'much more' in the way you have (though many native speakers do so) and when writing lists, we use commas and put an 'and' before the final item.

Also, 'could' rather than 'would' is appropriate here as we are talking about a distinct possibility in the future and 'would' is more the conditional/hypothetical form of 'want' (as opposed to 'can')

I have put a ? next to a word where I was not able to guess the meaning. Happy to help you find the right word if you would like to later.

Finally, in English we don't separate our punctuation from the words like this ! It seems minor but an English examiner could penalise you for it.

It would be cool if you could similarly look at my own efforts in French!

Well done again!

Sam

Gratitude (1)

Hello my fellow pals. I'm happy today ! I think we should always consider the brighter side of the life. There are is always green grass out there, but also dirty grass in at the same time. The world is what we make of it. Be the change that you want to see in this world (as Gandhi said). The world is full of joy, full of pain. You may contribute a verse to this prodigious show (as Robin Williams said). You should make it positively, while you still can. We are in this world for a limited period of time. Some decades ? Some years ? Some weeks ? We don't know how many. Our life could certainly end this century or maybe this month.

So, I urge you to always act positively around you. Be the kind drop in the an ocean of water. Be compassionate. Be aware of the weak(? maybe weakness? or weak people around you?) that surrounds you. Not only in the cold winter when it's freezing outside, but at any every moment. Be present, feel alive, and most important : have gratitude !

Gratitude is important ! I read it in the Magic Book of Rhonda Byrne. We should be happy and grateful about what we have, while we have it, unless since it would could be removed from us. Gratitude is a wonderful feeling because it brings joy into us. We feel alive, happy to have what we have.

Thank you, thank you, thank you ! Thank you for the love I can give to and receive from my father, my wife, my friends. Thanks for the my (or our) health. Thanks for the sun that shines (even rarely in the cold winter, it shines). Thanks for the mornings. Thanks for the coffee. Thanks for the water I can drink.

I had a water outage (failure?) yesterday in my street, I know what it means to not have water to drink. I feel am very aware of it and I tell myself that a lot of people are facing this each ("every" sounds better) day, especially Palestinians which whom I have a lot of thoughts and positive waves for. I understand also that facing an electrical outage could cause much even more troubles. In our occidental way of life, to face a lack of electricity means not to be able to prepare dinner, to warm our house's rooms…

So, thank you, thank you, thank you !
Thank you for having such a my (unless you are thanking the other person because they have a beautiful life) beautiful life, with friends, family, love, health.
I still don't haven't found work for several months but I feel useful and happy with my volunteer actions. I am in awe with the nature, the birds, the sun shining and the people that cares for me.

Thank you! A very wonderful piece.