About the Internet..........

The development of the Internet, has provided people with more and more information, but some people believe that this information could be beneficial to people, while others think that so much information creates problems. I personally agree with the former opinion. There are several reasons for this.

To begin with, the advantages gained by people from the Internet far outweighs the disadvantages because of the information explosion?. Without the Internet, nowadays, lots of workers cannot do their work; university students cannot study, and businessmen cannot acquire valuable information for their business. Needless to say, the Internet fills an important role to provide people valuable information in modern times. Take education and research in universities as an example, nearly all professors and students use the Internet to look for journals, papers, and study materials. Of course, those materials are very important for their study and research and because they can acquire the information more quickly and conveniently, "the internet saves them time". "while they cannot do it with without it". This is unrelated to the topic of the main sentence. It needs its own sentance or should be deleted. I added an ending to the sentence that is related.   

Second, it is a matter of choice that whether the information is valuable to someone or not. Thus, it is necessary to choose valuable information from the massive amount of useless information because different people need different information. That means we need to prioritize information which is most valuable to us. For example, as I am an university student whose major is physics, the most valuable information for me is papers and journals related to my disciplines and projects, which means most of the time, I focus on the information corresponding to physics and mathematics problems. And when I am working on something, I concentrate on materials I use for work, but when I have leisure time, I can read something else. Thus, I do not think too much information could create problems if you know how to choose the ones you need.

Third, it is undeniable that information provided by the Internet has improved my life and work to a large extent. Nowadays, we can know what happens around the world just by reading news with on the computer; We also can watch movies or entertainment without pay from the internet, and what is more is that what we can do with the Internet is far more than these.

In conclusion, even though the Internet can provide us with numerous information, some of which might irrelevant to us, as long as we can choose information which is useful to us, the internet is valuable. 

I have copy edited the notebook, and am going to comment on a couple things I see that could be improved on. 

Information is a singular noun, so "those information" cannot be written, or "numerous information". Always "this or that information", "numerous amounts of information"

Separate paragraphs, and run on sentences. 

Over all, pretty good. I probably didn't catch everything, nor am I a actually language teacher, so take what I say with a grain of salt.